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someone is whispering -------------------------------------------
The "spirits" chase me through the tunnels of my mind...
Haunting me with these "secrets" of life...
challenging my every move.
Making me feel as if I'll slip and fall into the darkness of true reality.
The markings on these walls are strange...
Telling me the story of ages ago.
Making me see the truth...
and the lies.
Making me run from it all...
Keeping me on the move at every waking second.
Running...
Through the darkness...
Frightened...
Not alone in this darkness...
"Spirits" telling me things I don't want to hear.
Making me see the lies you've given me...
Always changing my mind...
Unlocking new doors for me to go through...
Into blues, greens, reds, and...
Black...
Darkness.
Always leading me to the end.
waking me up when the "spirits" have finished their trickory.
Filling me with bad visions...
People dying, changing, leaving, and turning away to another side.
They're getting consumed with the anger inside...
Always whispering to me...
Well, I've always been a fan of your writing, you know that. I love this, I do. The rythem is always in your poems at first, is it on purpose that you seem to lose the rythem? Or is it just my imagination that makes it seem like the rythem leaves around mid poem? Anyway, this made me feel very lost, or, not wanting to know the way at all... well, if you understand this, more power to you...
This is powerful. You put it into words beautifully! I cannot identify with this exactly, but I can identify with something that I think is similar. Try reading my poem "Someone". I'd love to talk more about this with you. But read "Someone" first so that you know what I have experienced. Later! Outlaw
Submission Name: someone is whispering
