it puts an image in your head.. one that discribes everything you said.. making me feel at peace. i really like it, the word play is great and wouldn't be completely understandable if i didn't know you... hope you post more... i would love to read them
nice piece and I do think that flouting is supposed to be floating but I didn't catch that until I read it again. But I liked how you made the images connect...but I think that you used newborn too much or maybe you just used it to make a point known...I don't know. It sounds like some sad cliché' of love and not the real thing but that's just me.