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    dots Submission Name: I Long Todots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I wrote this when I was really young (early teens or so), and reading too much Emily Dickinson.


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    dotsI Long Todots
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    I will always mourn for those who've gone before me,
    though I know them not,
    I long to.
    I will always pray for their immortal souls,
    though I know them not,
    I long to.




    Submitted on 2004-03-23 03:39:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Actually, with the 'disclaimer' in the description i was expecting something different. i well liked the first three lines and again, the last three.

    i never wrote when i was young. i just poured pop in my cereal and did a lot of sleepwalking.

    cheers,
    ghost.
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by myghostsliketotravel | [ Reply to This ]
      good god did somebody just call you a pre-teen... LMMFAO @ THAT... it may be a compliment tho.. I do not agree with certain comments on this write.. it is not too short... I see someone who wants to meet famous people on the other side.. oh well it works for me
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good. a little short, but good. well done.
    the repetion of "i long to" also helps get it into the readers mind the piont your getting across
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by enchantress | [ Reply to This ]


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