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"We Wish You A Merry Chrismas"

Author: painofthanatos
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"We Wish You A Merry Chrismas"

Two days before Christmas the radio sang to me
It wasn’t the best song exactly
Not the sweetest voice, either
But just enough to lift my spirits
“We wish you a Merry Christmas” the voices sang in unison
Men. Women.
Altos. Sopranos.
They were all singing for me
Until I changed the station
But all the same – for me
Only I don’t think they were wishing hard enough
Because it didn’t go to swell this year
A friend’s grandfather was hospitalized
Someone couldn’t see their family
And I couldn’t wait to get away from mine
I just wanted to be alone
I shut my door and turn on my radio
“We wish you a Merry Christmas”
…you’re too late
It’s over and it’s ruined
And no amount of singing can change that

Submitted on 2004-12-26 11:59:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  looking through some past works of yours i found this piece most expressive and relatable. i liked the way you underlyed your feelings here- if i could pick a piece of yours, this would be the one i would pick. i liked the style and raw emotion let out- no bled out here. i hate christmas time myself, and am always up for depressing christmas words.
| Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
  This was good. I like the way you ended the little sentance things in the right spot. And this "“We wish you a Merry Christmas” the voices sang in unison
Men. Women.
Altos. Sopranos.
They were all singing for me"
That is my favorite part...well good job.
| Posted on 2004-12-26 00:00:00 | by punkpixie | [ Reply to This ]

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