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    dots Submission Name: Morrisondots
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    Author: leper messiah
    ASL Info:    21~f~New England
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 197/249/38
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    Description:
       Its about Jim Morrison, if you like the Doors you could check it out, some of it only makes sense if you know the story: he died supposedly in his bath tub, at the hotel in France...No one witnessed the death certificate except his <deceased as well> girlfriend Pam, so who knows, maybe he's still out there somewhere...nah, he'd be disgusted by the world today. Thanks, its really a work in progress so any comments/feedback appreciated!


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    ~That California-drift musta never left
    the whole time at his hotels where the worry most definitely fell on deaf ears--maybe because they weren't Parisiens; maybe because they saw it in his glassy eyes, in his woman's ambivalence...
    He was calm in his Meditate-terranean psyche,
    the European style a velveteen and soothing balm to his eyelids, ones that winced of seeing fame pervert his curiosity
    His belly and his blood both boiling
    mid-morning or early afternoon, send that girl to all her tortured whacked-out friends; counts and barons of countries that only exist when you've got heroin in your pocket...
    She begs the misery, from me, he thinks,
    the wandering Dionysus in his fetes of wine and erotic relvelries reflects a moment before
    So she wasn't there this day...Left his questions singing sirens in the air, the bacchanalia began, but the muses were all slaughtered as his lust turns to anguished confusion unclear
    His girl, where was she? She reminded him of a loaded gun so well...
    And there calmly, with his visions of hypnotic dance and gambles with the suns,
    he slipped away from us
    this god, the immortal poet of azure daparture,
    A mournful voice echoing in the stars~




    Submitted on 2004-03-23 08:09:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oops i just noticed i got the quote wrong.. totally butchered it in fact.. it was 'did you have a good world when you died'.. i knew something sounded wrong. sorry bout that..
    | Posted on 2004-07-31 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      oh wow.. how did i miss this? i've always been fascinated by him.. so enigmatic.. everytime i listen to american prayer.. i get chills at the part.. 'did you have a good life? enough to base a movie on..?'..

    your poem captures.. almost pins down.. that elusive quality.. the poem as a whole made me think of one image in particular.. not the words of the poem but what you were doing with it.. and that was the pinning down of a butterfly in a glass case.. i dont know how exactly to describe it.. but it's like you are trying to pinpoint this evasive quality about him and you do it as beautifully as you can.. but then in a way.. it's an impossible task (painful even) because .. we will never know the truth.

    i dont know if any of this makes sense.. but that's the feeling your writing left me with..
    | Posted on 2004-07-31 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      well your fully right when you say he would be disgusted if he was still round today... youve created this really well and your use of imagery was brilliant! i love the Doors! awesome write!
    | Posted on 2004-06-15 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good, I like how you brought about the subject of Mr. Morrison, and his untimely death, I have a couple of friends who like the doors, and they are concerned of it aswell, who knows, maybe he really is still walking this planet, I agree, he would probably be disgusted.
    | Posted on 2004-04-17 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i love this. i love Jim, and The Doors which is why it caught my eye.... this read so much like one of his poems. beautiful and ebbing. nice work. and you're right, he would be disgusted.
    | Posted on 2004-04-04 00:00:00 | by Voodoo_Lounge | [ Reply to This ]
      awesome...maybe i'm partial...i love jim morrison with a passion...rum butter voice- i can here it now...love me two times BABY...this is great...had to read it a couple times 'cause of the structure, but just didn't care...was a great tribute...hate to point this out because it was so good, but ambivOlence...sorry babe...it was buggin' me like a tag stickin' out of a candy girl lowriders...fantastic work BTW
    | Posted on 2004-07-17 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ]
      please forgive me...i am wrong...wow...whatanassamI...ambivalence...just looked it up...*blushes* guess your piece was perfect after all...sorry doll...i should research BEFORE i comment like that!
    | Posted on 2004-07-17 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ]



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