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    dots Submission Name: Thank Youdots
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    Author: AmandaLyn
    ASL Info:    18/F/ Centralia
    Elite Ratio:    3.59 - 292/292/42
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 308
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    Description:
       It took being engaged twice and being dumped both times by the dame guy to finally realize he wasn't for me..... stupid me! love is SO blind!


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    dotsThank Youdots
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    Thank you for leaving me
    when I was too afraid to leave you
    You did something
    I was too scared to do.

    I don't know how long
    I knew you weren't for me
    we argued about everything
    thanks for setting me free

    I remember promising
    to never hurt you like before
    but everytime I was with you,
    I felt I needed more.

    You didn't know it,
    but I really left months ago
    my heart wasn't in it,
    even though I cried for you not to go.

    I know I'm not wasting my life,
    still looking for mr. right
    I'm truly happy now,
    I know my future is bright.

    So,

    Thank you for leaving me
    when I was too afraid to leave you
    You did something
    I was too scared to do.




    Submitted on 2004-12-27 14:16:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very nice write..relationships and love are never straight forward.. but instead very complex.. i like the way you describe wanting someone but not wanting them all at the same time..i think it is something many people can relate to...I like all of it but in particular this part:

    I remember promising
    to never hurt you like before
    but everytime I was with you,
    I felt I needed more.

    im going to add this to my favs thanks..
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      it is really good to see a glimmer of hope!
    "I'm truly happy now,
    I know my future is bright."
    Never think your life is for naught when you are a princess of the King of Kings! God has a plan for you and nothing will stand in the way!
    God Bless you, and may his love encompass you!
    -shawn
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]
      blessings in disguise can sometimes be the best things. very well written and insightful poem. the flow is good and the rhyming perfect. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      its seems like that just happend to me almost two weeks ago surperb writing keep up the good work "You didn't know it,
    but I really left months ago" was my favorite part in the whole poem
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by Lucy L. | [ Reply to This ]
      Ya i think everyone could relate to this. everyone has been in a relationship that they weren't totally happy in. good.Good poem well done.
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by RichieHM | [ Reply to This ]
      This I can totally relate. I was in a realtionship for a long time and my heart wasn't in it. Finally he broke up with me, and I realized that it made me happier.
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by closebutremote | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really great poem. Its got a really nice 'story' behind it and is sad and happy at the same time.

    love from Heather
    x
    | Posted on 2005-01-01 00:00:00 | by poketmouse | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem does not agree with me, I feel the sadness, I feel the happiness and then I think of Billy and I get upset. Not that that was something I wasn't feeling already, but still... I realy like the way the whole thing fir together, it seemed to flow, I think the rhyming was a big part of that... Its to bad I'm no good at rhyming... Thanks for writing!
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by TDALBH | [ Reply to This ]



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