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    dots Submission Name: The Thief and the Liardots
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    Author: closebutremote
    ASL Info:    22/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 54/77/16
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1052
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Just some recent events.


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    dotsThe Thief and the Liardots
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    To: The Thief

    You came to me,
    In grave solitude,
    You offered me so much so fast,
    I knew something like this could not last,
    But the fun we had, it was a blast,
    We drew closer each day,
    Talking on the phone,
    To keep from feeling alone,
    It was getting old, and going nowhere,
    So I found someone new,
    It was my mind that he blew,
    I talked to him more and more,
    And you less and less,
    Making you quit sore,
    Don't throw your evil words at me,
    You make me hate you,
    We just won't speak anymore.
    You started talking to my new someone,
    To my astonishment, I find you talk to him more,
    He likes you more,
    That I can't ignore.
    You said you don't like his type,
    So I know why you're doing this.
    This from my mind I must wipe.




    Submitted on 2004-12-27 14:29:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lots and lots of angst! oooooo I enjoy angst. I'm gonna read the second part to see how it finishes up. Like the soap opera-ish situational stuff. Its a nice feature.
    ~Paco!
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by Paconess1006 | [ Reply to This ]
      Who is this new person.Why do you not gossip about this with the sister.What the hell James.I think this sounds great I enjoyed the explanation with rhyme,and it was a diffrent sceme.You have such a talent,you are the bomb
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked it I think you did a good job explaining yourself and still rhyming i liked how you didn't have the first person stay with the new person
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by kickthekitty | [ Reply to This ]


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