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    dots Submission Name: The Liardots
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    Author: closebutremote
    ASL Info:    22/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 54/77/16
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 766
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 492



    Description:
       the second part to "the thief and the liar"


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    dotsThe Liardots
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    To: The Liar

    I don't have much to say,
    Just that you promised me thing I wasn't getting anywhere else,
    Taking from me, my kiss, my heart,
    How could you do that when you're not serious?
    Ok, so I backed off after aquiring certain information,
    But it was like I was locked in.
    Then a friend I knew well took all that was promised away from me.
    You're just a liar, and you need to be with your type. (The Thief)




    Submitted on 2004-12-27 14:32:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ow, thats a punch to the face. I like how both your pieces have the same feel but differing concepts. Its very good. I love it. Keep this up and you'll go places *the kitchen for example*... just kidding, but seriously, thats talent.
    ~Paco!
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by Paconess1006 | [ Reply to This ]
      James I want to know who this is.I love the way you talk write,its like your there telling me this,its so you. I hope that this is something that is soon to be over so you can feel better about this whole bad situation.Untill then let that be the reason for the beautiful words that spill out.
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]


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