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    dots Submission Name: Saddnessdots
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    Author: ForsakenAngel
    ASL Info:    19/F/Arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    6.37 - 147/73/18
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
        The same as my Invisible poem, for those of you who haven't read it I am not looking for anything specific just your thoughts on it.


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    dotsSaddnessdots
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    Is it something that you can see,
    is it something you can hear?
    No, you cannot see or hear it,
    or even touch it, but you can feel it.

    Felt,
    although unwanted still there,
    still there but not present for everyone to know.
    It must be kept hidden.
    It must not be acknoledged,
    for it may cause alarm.

    It causes so many problems,
    so much pain, so much blood.
    It is the reason we no longer have her.
    It has taken our Depressed and Forsaken Angel away from us.

    It is like silence broken by light drops of rain on a cold winter day.
    It is in everyone,
    yet noone but her and she cannot escape.
    She keeps it and must stay forever hidden.
    It is Saddness.




    Submitted on 2004-12-28 00:06:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sadness unfortunately brings about some of the best poetry and prose, it's how alot of us deal with everyday life, the sad part is that some can't deal with it and end up ending their lives, tis' a cowards way out and only continues to give sadness to those left behind, I liked this and I'm not sad, because you have done what most of us choose to do, fight sadness with true expression...kudos...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing, again like "Invisible" i feel i can really relate to this poem bc i feel sadness more often then not, and that in its self is rather sad. I think we all deserve some happiness its just knowing where to find it and for some of us its hard to do , even those who look happy hold something dark in them, i know bc i am one of those people all you have to do is read to find out. I try to appear happy and at times indifferent but never sad but i really am and i feel rather alone at times too. Anyway great write keep it up. Adios

    Chon
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by xPoetxBoyx | [ Reply to This ]


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