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    dots Submission Name: A Blank Heart Never Healsdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       THis is about the same stupid situation I am in and my coward stupid self because I can't tell him how I feel.Like everything will just be okay and everything will suddenly happen for me...yeah right.But here this is.


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    dotsA Blank Heart Never Healsdots
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    A blank world is a void
    A blank mind is my own
    you look inside and turn away

    A scarred heart that will never heal
    A broken mirror that isn't real

    A blank world filled with blank smiles
    will I ever smile for you

    A scarred heart never heals
    And I am wounded everyday

    with the pain of holding a secret
    the unbearable mistake of feelings kept inside
    I am sure that I will be scarred forever
    I am sure that I am blank

    I am sure that I will never tell you about me
    my heart could never be seen by you




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      Most teenage girls, or wait, all girls can relate to this. :S Feeling like the guy they like will never notice them. I feel this way now actually! haha Oh well. A New Year is coming up. Make it the best you can. :) Maybe you'll get enough courage to show him your heart and how you feel. Good luck. Good piece. I totally relate to it.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree this is nicely written. You do a good job poryraying your feelings. I can relate. I look forward to reading more of your work.
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      a heart can't be blank to feel emotions as you have described here this was sad to read but understandable as someone who has been chrushed by love, only you can fill in the "blanks", I hope they will be happy fills, have a great new year...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      your begining could be better and i agree you are to hard on your self you dont have to try and ryme every line not all poems have to ryme
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by urweird310 | [ Reply to This ]
      well quite a lovely piece you have there but you're being too harsh on yourself and your heart will heal and find the way and you will be on and be loved one day.. smile life is a 2 sided coin
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont think that you forced any rhyme. you did great in portraying your feelings (as usual). ho0pefully you will get up the courage to tell him how you feel. you never know, he might feel the same and if you wait too long you might miss your chance. even if you dont "tell" him, you could try and do things to kinda show him that you are interested in him. i hope everything works out. good write by the way.
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by _Joeysgirl_ | [ Reply to This ]
      thanks i like this part the most...
    A scarred heart that will never heal
    A broken mirror that isn't real

    A blank world filled with blank smiles
    will I ever smile for you

    A scarred heart never heals
    And I am wounded everyday

    nice job
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by closebutremote | [ Reply to This ]


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