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    dots Submission Name: One word questionsdots

    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsOne word questionsdots

    Yes I'm broken
    Inside and out.
    Not by you.
    Don't want you touchhing me.
    Don't want you near.
    Back up
    Stop right there.
    Don't you dare come one step closer.
    Only with you.
    You are banished from my heart,
    Gone from my mind,
    I want you out of my sight.
    To see you leave,
    A dream come true.

    Submitted on 2004-12-28 11:58:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i relate to this......this is very good i love this part the most

    Not by you.
    Don't want you touchhing me.
    Don't want you near.
    Back up
    Stop right there.
    Don't you dare come one step closer."

    this is set up well and the one word question is very unique and it was pretty cool on how you made it fit to were the flow was consistant..

    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by truthbetold | [ Reply to This ]
      This is the type of question and answer thing I was referring to do for your last piece. I like the format. It works well with the one word thing. :) Good job. Dreams do come true just like you've wrote about. :)
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      quite.. very impressive piece of work you have there , the feelings of anger and gratitude after accomplishing something or the end of a nightmare.. very well done.. i hope your heart heals keep on writing,.
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]

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