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    dots Submission Name: The Perfect Matchdots
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    Author: closebutremote
    ASL Info:    22/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 54/77/16
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 893
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 824



    Description:
       Just a description of a couple that based thier relationship on the spite of another.


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    dotsThe Perfect Matchdots
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    You thief,
    You give me grief,
    You had my trust, my beleif.
    That's ok, it really is,
    You showed me who you really are,
    You deserve the liar you met at the bar,
    Whom you took to the backseat of your car,
    He was so easy, you didn't have to go far,
    You both deserve each other,
    I want to end this hate,
    But I'm afraid it's too late,
    To contemplate,
    Makes me irate,
    To think of your mate,
    When we spoke, it's my words you ate,
    It's me you both irritate,
    The time you break, I can't wait,
    By then you'll be over it, it got old,
    So the truth be told,
    My trust you've sold,
    And you dared to be so bold,
    Both your hearts are so cold.




    Submitted on 2004-12-28 13:17:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this, the flow and everything about it. again like i told you before i like the rhyming. I can relate to it only me with a guy and of course you with a girl. It hurts when that happens.

    peace out
    mikki
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was cool, I liked this part best,
    "He was so easy, you didn't have to go far,
    You both deserve each other,
    I want to end this hate,
    But I'm afraid it's too late,
    To contemplate,
    Makes me irate,
    To think of your mate,
    When we spoke, it's my words you ate,
    It's me you both irritate,
    The time you break, I can't wait,"


    Good Job
    Peace
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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