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Never Goodbye

Author: POETRY
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This is deticated to my nana who is now passing at this time and I wrote it to her because I am really close and it hurts right now to see her go. So...I hope you like it.

Never Goodbye

You never really miss someone
until you notice their gone
And then you finally realize that you no longer have that one thing that made you whole,
And now you feel all alone
Its hard to get through times like this,
Because of that one person you are going to miss,
Your heart brakes in half
To where yo shed tears instead of as laugh.
To where you can no lobger breathe,
and there is nothing you can do.
It makes you break down and cry,
To a point you feel like you want to die.
All these tears I have cryed have done nothing but create a flood that I am now drowning in.
I never thought this day would come,
The day thet I would have to say goodbye to someone I truly loved,
But its here but I am not going to say goodbye
Because it is never goodbye its always "see you later."

Submitted on 2004-12-28 15:36:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I am sorry to hear of your loss and I hope you take some comfort in knowing your nana is in a much better place.

a few comments on the text of your post. you may want to go through and comb out the spelling errors.

I also thought it would sound a bit more polished if you were to end with "Until next time we meet." or "good bye for now." but it is your write not mine. :)

again sorry for your loss. I'll keep you and your family in my prayers.
| Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  I am very sorry for your loss, my best wishes for you..the poem was real sad..i think that people can realte to it in different ways as well as someone who is passing...of coarse im not gonna say that you should fix errors, cuz i have tons of them ...i like this poem the way it is because its just fulll of emotion and it seemed to come of my tongue easily, which is very good...again sorry for you loss...bye
| Posted on 2004-12-29 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with Auro about most things and this is a very good poem and I am soooo sooooo sorry about your nana. I lost mine last year and I know how you feel. We were close as well.
| Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]

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