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    dots Submission Name: No More Pain...dots

    Author: ForsakenAngel
    ASL Info:    19/F/Arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    6.37 - 147/73/18
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       First of all this is kindof a mix of depression, death, and pain as well. On this one I basically just want you guys/girls thoughts on it and PLEASE tell me if you like it or not. Don't be nice I need to know what you think. Oh this is just my thoughts and feelings at that time and luckily I had my best friend to keep me with her. If it weren't for her you probably wouldn't be reading any of my work.

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    dotsNo More Pain...dots

    As I look back on this life of mine,
    I see there is nothing left to live for.

    I am alone, away from everyone.
    Why should I go on living?
    I can only blame myself for my sorrow.

    I push the blade harder until I see a trickle,
    Why did it have to come to this,
    my life was considered perfect on the outside...but on the inside I was screaming...

    I was screaming to be set free,
    away from all the pain.

    I ask myself what is to become of me,
    then begin to tremble,
    I drop the knife.

    Why can't I do it, Why?
    I don't wish to live this life of mine, I wish to die.
    I need to get away from all the pain,
    So why can't I do it?

    Soon my pain will end.
    All the feeling has drained from my being and I am numb.

    I begin to feel weak,
    as my life passes before my eyes the darkness comes...Soon I will be gone and there will be no more pain...

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      I felt that way last year, but I wouldn't have stoped if it were not for, well, that's kind of funny, the guy that made me that depressed. He took away all my sharp objects and yelled at me. Anyway, I really liked it. I have to favorite lines in this one...
    "As I look back on this life of mine,
    I see there is nothing left to live for."
    I like that part because that's how I feel whenever I look back at my life, in fact, if anything there are reasons to kill myself. Ah well, my two best friends (Who sadly seem to be falling away from me) tell me theres more and make me promise to stay, at least for one more night.
    "I was screaming to be set free,
    away from all the pain."
    Sometimes I liked to make believe that everything was fine. I liked acting, making people believe that there was nothing wrong. I also like the way you compaired being set free to your pain going away, I do that all the time. The thing is, our pain will never go away until we're dead. Sorry, I know, sounds a bit obvious now that I look back on it. Well, thanks for writing, keep it up! I love reading your stuff.
    | Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by TDALBH | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure I liked this, only because according to your discription it's true. That actually makes me want to go home and hold my kids just a bit tighter then normal.

    what could make a child (and please i mean no disrespect with that) think that there is nothing more to life? what could have happend to make this young person, who is supposed to be our future lose all hope? When and how do you get to the point where you say f*ck it all there is no point?
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      These writes are always really emotion when they discuss death. I think that this really allows us to see how important each and everyone of us is. We may not seem important but when we are gone we are missed so much by others that they wish they were dead. I think that death should be done away with.
    I hope you can get through it. If you ever need someone to talk to all of us are hear to do it. Kay?
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by johnny boy | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa...no way.

    This was everything I felt when I was in that position...Down to every word. I've never read a more accurate depiction of what goes through someone's head when they try to commit suicide. This is so haunting and honest, I love it. The emotion in this poem was so pure...You are an excellent writer. I'm glad your friend was there to keep you from going through with it.

    Oh yeah, and if you want to know about my experience with this subject, you should check out my poem "An Act of Love". I'm not asking for comments or anything, just if you're interested, you should check it out. It has a lot in common with No More Pain.

    Man I loved this. You are going to go far one day. Cheers!
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by Apocalyptica | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this poem. it has alot of deep emotions goin on. My best friend is always there for me too. my fav lines
    I am alone, away from everyone
    Why should I go on living?
    I can only blame myself for all my sorrow
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by ria_pixie | [ Reply to This ]

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