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    dots Submission Name: Fighting the Pain Called Life...dots

    Author: ForsakenAngel
    ASL Info:    19/F/Arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    6.37 - 147/73/18
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       Well this is one written along time ago as well and I only feel like this sometimes and Yes, I am getting help. Well I will be getting help soon actually. Ohh and tell me what you think of it and the title. Like I told Morgan it helps to get them out here for others to see. It relieves the pressure I have been keeping inside.

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    dotsFighting the Pain Called Life...dots

    There is a pain kept deep inside of me,
    Fighting to be revealed.
    This pain is called life.

    It is to hard to overcome,
    I am fading, falling, it must end.
    I can't go on fighting,
    being ripped apart by the pain and emotions,
    kept deep inside of me.

    You may think that my life is perfect,
    well you are wrong.
    It is worthless and has no purpose in the world.
    Everyone would be better off if I were gone.

    Lifes pain is to much to bear now,
    to much to endure.
    No more living,
    only more death starting with my own.
    I must go.

    It is getting dark,
    now I am affraid that this is were we depart.
    As I draw my last breath,
    I say goodbye and let death consume me...

    Submitted on 2004-12-28 19:15:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is sad.. I hate to think that you are this unhappy with your life....it makes me wanna hug you and say it'll be ok....it's good though...I just don't like to think of you being this unhappy...kinda like how you didn't like they Idea you got from my "forever?"
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      you must be really having a bad day, I've read other stuff of yours and it was much better than this, come out of the dark and shine some light on all that talent you have within you, the world would not be better off without you and you are worthy, you just have to believe in your own abilities, cuz surely you didn't display it here, you and I know you are much better and I look forward to reading it soon, so get busy and please turn the light on, have a great new year...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-12-28 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]

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