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    dots Submission Name: Faithdots
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    Author: Civilian
    ASL Info:    21/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    7.14 - 146/166/35
    Words: 14
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1448
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    Bytes: 83



    Description:
       This is another haiku, and quiet self-explanatory. Look out for the punnery so you can fully undertstand the poem- any commentary would be appreciated.


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    dotsFaithdots
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    Faith is a window
    Her panes protect my fortune
    As winds claw the sill




    Submitted on 2004-12-29 00:04:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey there. Wow. I've never read your stuff before, but I'm very impressed. Haiku is my favorite poetry form. And this is one excellent example of a haiku.

    The idea of this poem, faith as a window is just awesome. And the wind as the antagonist to faith. The wind representing struggle and the worlds trials I'm assuming.

    This is great writing my dear.

    I must also say that it makes me excessivly happy to see a haiku on this site with the correct format. I've seen tons of so-called haikus with the wrong format. That peeves me to no end. Anyhoo...much love to ya my dear.
    | Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this very much. Faith is indeed a protective window from the winds of the world. Thanks for expressing that viewpoint so beautifully. mae
    | Posted on 2004-12-29 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]
      so where so close on be perfectly lined up with the pattern. the last line though should have had the same number of syllables as the fist.
    just five.
    i am so gald to see that there is another person here that write hikius. i havent posted any yet. i ve been trying to work on lemricks.,
    i am going to give you my messenger. if you ever need help on want to write lemrickshikius back and forth i shall meet you there.
    falulu2004@hotmail.com or kutless28@yahoo.com
    peace snuff
    | Posted on 2005-01-01 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]


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