[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: The Embracedots

    Author: riverseo
    ASL Info:    18/Male/Belfast
    Elite Ratio:    4.17 - 24/34/13
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1164
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 724

       Ahh this is a recent poem by me, im new here but have been writing since June...Its free verse i just write for my own enjoyment really, but i hope others can enjoy it too...me i am in love, but worried it may be simply a dream, and all dreams end sometime...wellenjoy

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Embracedots

    Wrapped against the night in another’s arms
    Knowing everything in life is alright
    Knowing they are going to be there tomorrow
    When things might not be so good
    A lightening strike in everything we’ve done

    Every night we have held each other close
    Heart to heart we hold each other tight
    Whispering sweet nothings in the dark
    Nothing but the night to hear
    What secrets does the embrace hold?

    So I’m lying there thinking how much I love you
    You’re in my arms here with me tonight
    At least I think you are its all in my dreams
    Reaching out from beyond the reality
    Into my heart to embrace my soul….

    Submitted on 2004-12-29 15:37:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      I think if anyone has ever been in Love they can relate to that poem Playboi.
    I loved the way you wrote it it was sweet and touching and make you wish you were lying next to the one your in love with.
    Im adding that poem to one of my favorites keep up the good lovin
    !This Girl Will Never Be Stopped Holla!
    - D.Johnosn
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by D.Johnson p.s.a | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it, and understand what you mean.
    :At least I think you are its all in my dreams:
    it might sound better with a comma between are and its (it's). other than that great write!

    My favorite line..
    :What secrets does the embrace hold?:
    | Posted on 2004-12-29 00:00:00 | by Kisseddirt | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Fasade written by jackz
    Ache written by rev.jpfadeproof
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    I Do, I Do written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    written by Daniel Barlow
    True Death written by layDsayD
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Every..... written by jackz
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    Summer written by layDsayD
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Carry written by saartha




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]