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    dots Submission Name: The Embracedots

    Author: riverseo
    ASL Info:    18/Male/Belfast
    Elite Ratio:    4.17 - 24/34/13
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1127
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       Ahh this is a recent poem by me, im new here but have been writing since June...Its free verse i just write for my own enjoyment really, but i hope others can enjoy it too...me i am in love, but worried it may be simply a dream, and all dreams end sometime...wellenjoy

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    dotsThe Embracedots

    Wrapped against the night in another’s arms
    Knowing everything in life is alright
    Knowing they are going to be there tomorrow
    When things might not be so good
    A lightening strike in everything we’ve done

    Every night we have held each other close
    Heart to heart we hold each other tight
    Whispering sweet nothings in the dark
    Nothing but the night to hear
    What secrets does the embrace hold?

    So I’m lying there thinking how much I love you
    You’re in my arms here with me tonight
    At least I think you are its all in my dreams
    Reaching out from beyond the reality
    Into my heart to embrace my soul….

    Submitted on 2004-12-29 15:37:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think if anyone has ever been in Love they can relate to that poem Playboi.
    I loved the way you wrote it it was sweet and touching and make you wish you were lying next to the one your in love with.
    Im adding that poem to one of my favorites keep up the good lovin
    !This Girl Will Never Be Stopped Holla!
    - D.Johnosn
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by D.Johnson p.s.a | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it, and understand what you mean.
    :At least I think you are its all in my dreams:
    it might sound better with a comma between are and its (it's). other than that great write!

    My favorite line..
    :What secrets does the embrace hold?:
    | Posted on 2004-12-29 00:00:00 | by Kisseddirt | [ Reply to This ]

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