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    dots Submission Name: Wardots
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    Author: Quin
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 39/39/21
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1117
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    Description:
       This is a short snippit on war, and what it accomplishes...very short. Almost Haiku Short.


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    dotsWardots
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    Washed in a sea of red,
    There are no more disguises.
    Everyone , red as blood, will be the same.
    No more discriminating predjudices shall be brought forth.
    No more identity,
    Just the long painful silence of normality.
    Everyone covered in blood looks the same.




    Submitted on 2004-12-29 18:00:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is good. But it is a little choppy. I think you should make it flow better, but other than that it was great and i'm sure almost everyone around the world can reltae to this
    mikki
    | Posted on 2004-12-29 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]


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