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    dots Submission Name: Haikus of a Sortdots
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    Author: Quin
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 39/39/21
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       A collection of Haikus that I wrote. Fun times with Imagery. Yes. Read because...it's pretty?


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    dotsHaikus of a Sortdots
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    Haiku – a collection of my own


    Koi circling slowly
    Underneath dry autumn leaves
    Waiting to be fed.

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    Clouds flooding calmly
    Darkening as the day grows
    Never turning back.

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    Sitting under trees
    Of old, I wonder anew
    How the world stays clean?

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    Circling the world ‘round
    The sky ensnares the heavens
    Catching rays of light.

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    Moonlight on calm ocean
    Filtered rays of black and silver
    Reflects deep abyss.

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      Forget about the comments below, they have no idea on the subject so they shouldn't have spok- er, written in the first place.

    Haiku 1: A good one. Could mean simple patience from the little ones in nature.

    Haiku 2: I like it I personally think it's about the noble people who live through life with no regrets.

    Haiku 3:Like the pun in the second line, very nice. The image gathered from those words was of a dreamer in a forest. (eh, call me weird)

    Haiku 4: Either the clouds are the good that protects the people from the Sun OR the clouds are depriving the people from light. Either way it wasa good write.

    Haiku 5: Uh... i think u meant "calm"? for line 1 right? and number five... well it was just pretty

    Aken Sol

    BTW... what does |-|4/3 f|_||| ! mean?
    | Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by Aken Sol | [ Reply to This ]
      umm...i really dont know about this i'm not really that into hiaku poems. I don't know much about them either, but they were pretty good. and you are very right it does have good imagery.
    mikki
    | Posted on 2004-12-29 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm...wasnt really wild about these. i didnt really get the images you wanted us to. only 3 of them really gave me some nice imagery.
    bren
    | Posted on 2004-12-29 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]


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