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    dots Submission Name: The Bladedots
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    Author: shepj
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 17/25/5
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 923
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    Description:
       This may seem a little hard to understand to some readers. The Blade or the "new edge" is a knife. It was how I was feeling in the past and sometimes recently. I hope everyone that reads this enjoys it.
    Jeremy


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    dotsThe Bladedots
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    Falling deeper,
    Getting darker,
    Can no one hear my cry?

    I've come to this egde hoping I might die.

    Thanks to one I'm offered up,
    another chance to fly,

    There's just one catch to this new egde,
    this edge seems to shine.

    I see it in the darkest night,
    yet the edge is fine,
    It's sharp and clear and shines right back with only me in mind.

    It can take away my pain and only deal me slight,
    It's here for me in the brightest day or in the darkest night.

    This sharp edge can take away my fear,
    all it leaves is one small cut and my final tear.

    No one knows but it and I,
    the way that it should be,
    it never told a single soul and has yet to fail me.




    Submitted on 2004-12-30 10:09:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Your sarcasm refreshes and delights. It's been about ninety seconds. Where's that fight? I need some premium poems for the unite I'm doing in school.
    Your one and only,
    Kathleen
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      oh shut up, like ur so perfect. and anyway im just doing it so i can submit more poems not because i like you, and i happened to like the last one i wrote very much. so ha!
    The Cute One
    | Posted on 2005-02-05 00:00:00 | by Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay. Thank you for making this comment one that actually was worth writing cough *unlike the last one you wrote* cough.
    Jeremy
    | Posted on 2005-01-19 00:00:00 | by shepj | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you for your comment, and thank you for your suggestions (if I'm able to edit my poem on this site I'll definately change it to "or in the darkest night") I hope your found this poem enjoyable to read.
    Jeremy
    | Posted on 2004-12-31 00:00:00 | by shepj | [ Reply to This ]
      Thnx for another set of worthless comments on my poetry. Just what I always wanted... comments that had nothing to do with my writing. Keep up your great comments or some people might start missing them... not.
    Jeremy
    | Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by shepj | [ Reply to This ]


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