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    dots Submission Name: Ignorant Innocencedots
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    Author: Aken Sol
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 197/204/67
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       It's a Tanka. Old traditional Japanese form of poetry. I'm actually waiting for a response Tanka (look it up if you don't know what i'm talking about).


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    dotsIgnorant Innocencedots
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    Torn away by the wind
    A petal lifts off from the
    Flower it came from

    As does the flowers in fall
    Nothing can last forever




    Submitted on 2004-12-30 10:36:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      In the truest sense of Japanese tanka, you did a wonderful job, see in the US, people can't see the beauty in something so beautiful as what you wrote in most cases. This wasn't suppose to make anyone change environmental law,it was just to awaken our sense in a simplistic way.

    Great Tanka
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      and the soul man strikes again, what's up aken?, delightful write you have here, it's a tad haikuish and short crisp and to the point. Have you ever written a Eintou, it's a new form of african american poetry the format is on my "spoiled gift" submission. Anyhow great to see ya, keep penning...and happy New Year...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      You can pack a lot of meaning into those wonderful Japanese short poems. This is most definately an accoomplishment! Great job in tying the title to the theme of the poem.

    Simples styles are some of my favs, and you expounded on it. Go you.

    |-|4/3 f|_||| !
    ~Quin
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by Quin | [ Reply to This ]
      This was good. The flower will return again. Flowers are a lot like people. They come yet leave their seeds. They die but their existence lives on. You caught a lot in this. Good write.

    I disagree with the last comment.


    Alicia
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      um this poem doesnt seem to reflect the title and it is really short and doesnt seem to have a very deep purpose if you had more of an expanded idea i bet it would be great
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]


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