Is sounds as though you are talking about Jesus...? I'm not a big religious person, so if it's not, I wouldn't know... I liked how, although it wasn't abrupt with describing (like most poetry isn't), I could actually understand it. So yeah, kudos...
I like this! I like the short lines and direct voice. This could be about a guy, a child, or God. All three fit. You said a guy, so we'll leave it there. It is amazing how caring for another brings purpose to our lives. What was once a hollow quest for personal growth, becomes a selfless giving to another. I guess it's what they call love.
Your poem shows this change in the life of the narrator. Instead of waiting and hoping, she rules. Through the use of quick, brief images of past and present, we see this change happening and hopefully we realize that it is love. I think you have chosen all of the right words here, and that's important, because they are so few in number. I think it is "intertwined" and not as you have it. A fast paced look into the discovery of "love", the meaning of life, and the sense of belonging that love brings. I really enjoyed this, thanks for posting it.
Thats what it's all about right? Finding that one that you can rule your world with. I liked it, It was firm but loving at the same time. and that was the cool part about it. The way that you said you made him yours, but you still fell into his eyes, his lap, and fell into his love. entertwined, thats about the best feeling when you love someone. That feeling of not being so lost and scared and alone, cause you'll be with someone no matter what. I loved it micaela