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    Author: Civilian
    ASL Info:    21/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    7.14 - 146/166/35
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is another haiku I wrote; it's quite self-explanatory as it discusses the power that the poet has over his poetry. As always, any comments would be appreciated.


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    These lines are Eden
    Within them I ordain all
    My pen chisels fate




    Submitted on 2004-12-30 11:17:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...that was beautiful. It summed up perfectly the mind-set of a writer, young or old. We do write out our personal Eden's, our assumptions and hopes of Fate. Very good job indeed. Be well
    ~Rachel~
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by nebnim | [ Reply to This ]
      Love it man. Poet as creator theme here (and even if we don't create the things, we give them names and assign meaning to them). This is very well written, and i love the last line. In my estimation poets are very mighty creatures (we're also a mess of insecurities).
    I guess i can only speak for myself.

    well done, i enjoyed the read

    later, kc
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by twacky | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, ha... lines as in the lines of a poem...? Ah, okay... well... yeah... I am still REBORN UNTO THYSELF IN ITS AWESOMENESS AND WOWNESS AND COMPLETE CRITIQUING-NOT-NEEDEDNESS!
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by poetofthenight | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha I enjoyed it in it's wonderfulness. Wait that is a bed word. Okay so I like that it is just there and my mind understnads it and I really enjoy how you comare poets words to eden. It's so true.
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by Cigarette Smoke | [ Reply to This ]
      AAHHHHHHHHHHH! I LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT! I AM REBORN UNTO THYSELF... NO MORE DO I HAVE TO READ POETRY THAT DOESN'T MAKE SENSE!>!>! YES! Okay... I'm happy... love it... don't change it... great haiku.. those lines are like the lines on line paper, right!?!?! AWESOMENESS (AND WOWNESS)!
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by poetofthenight | [ Reply to This ]
      well i don't read much haiku, but i think you;ve done a good job on this nonetheless. i do like how you fit religion in there to. the power that emits from your words is strong enough to make an impact. i must say though, this is not how i would descirbe a poet (and there are so many ways). It sort of scares me because it's like a rule-the-world kind of thing. Iguess i'd have taken a different approach in writing a haiku about a poet. i just had to say that- haikus are so short that they should be FLAWLESS and should have as much to say as a prose poem would. the ending and the tone didn't quite sit right with me for what it was, but i still think it's cool to try something new. thumbs up .
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by NoMoreGoodbyes | [ Reply to This ]
      What's interesting is that when I read that I didn't think of God but of man instead (Adam in Eden to be specific.) Adam was given power to name the animals, he had complete freedom to do what he wanted when he wanted (with that tiny restriction over the apple.) But Adam couldn't reign over Eden for long, and that's what I got from it. A poet has power over the words for a short time, eventually they reclaim power over him. Good poem. As you can see it sent me off into a long winded train of thought. Good write.
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by Memphis | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting, given that over half of the poetry written these days seems to be about less than pleasant topics. Good to know a poet who creates eden in his verse. It is all within our power, our choice I suppose,
    Dave
    | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]


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