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    dots Submission Name: I Want You To Tell Medots
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    Author: Paconess1006
    ASL Info:    16/M/Charlotte, NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 99/126/46
    Words: 271
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Just wondering at all my questions lately.


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    dotsI Want You To Tell Medots
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    I want you to tell me:
    if thinking about her is too much
    if wondering about her is not enough
    if I should pick up the phone and call
    just to hear my heart fall,
    when she answers.

    I want you to tell me:
    if her picture should tell me anything
    if her voice should melt anything
    if her eyes should tell me where to catch her
    for I wish not to upset her,
    before she answers.

    I want you to tell me:
    what is love when you're in the middle of it
    what is love when you're next to it
    what is love when it stands on top of you
    what am I supposed to do,
    when she hugs me.

    I want you to tell me:
    how do I go about living without her
    how do I try and make things sound right without her
    how do I continue to write and speak
    and sound complete,
    when she writes she loves me.

    I want you to tell me:
    is what I'm doing hard
    is what I'm trying hard
    is what I want in life farfetched
    but her image is in me etched,
    when I write eternally.

    I want you to tell me:
    how to remedy my situation
    how to relieve my attempted confrontation
    how to reset my uncontrolled breathing
    I can't figure out what I'm leaving.
    Thats what I want you to tell me.

    I want you to tell me,
    what I want you to say,
    Am I going through L - O - V - E?
    Or just another regular day?




    Submitted on 2004-12-30 12:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      we actually don't have to tell you, the answer is within your own poem and within your heart, it's so obvious, look in the mirror, just don't let the reflection get in the way, an agonizing write for you, and many of us have been there, sort it out, you'll have no doubt and happy new year...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      Well the fact that you're thinking of her so much - that should sort of indicate whether you're in love. Rite?
    :)
    Nice write.
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      Do you love her. Hmm. I'm not sure, but it kind of points to YES! You never knoow, she could be feeling the exact same way. And by the way, des she have any idea that you like her?????????
    | Posted on 2005-01-26 00:00:00 | by Chicool2 | [ Reply to This ]
      This one made me want to be newly in love again. Not that my love has faded but I miss that feeling of the heart falling that you described.

    did you ever find out if it was really L-O-V-E?
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]


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