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Miles Are Immortal


Author: painofthanatos
Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 684 /571 /86
Words: 68
Class/Type: Poetry /
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It's really short - I want to make it longer, only don't quite know how. It's just kind of random rambling.


Miles Are Immortal



I never thought miles could grow
But there they are
Stretching to their limits
Finger tip to finger tip
Doing their best to fill all the space in between, and then some
They’re pulling us further and further apart
We’re stretching over the miles
Phone line to Phone line
We’re doing our best to kill all the space in between
Miles are immortal
Unlike our dying love…




Submitted on 2004-12-30 13:35:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I don't think you need to make it longer. I'm in a long-distance relationship now, so I know what this is like (though I don't suppose our love is dying). I thought capitalizing phone was a little odd.
| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  that was really powerful... your last line was amazaingly beautiful... I don't think it should be any longer.. your words made this piece perfect no matter what length you make it... great job
| Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]


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