Miles Are Immortal

Author: painofthanatos Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 684 /571 /86 Words: 68

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Miles Are Immortal

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I never thought miles could grow But there they are Stretching to their limits Finger tip to finger tip Doing their best to fill all the space in between, and then some They’re pulling us further and further apart We’re stretching over the miles Phone line to Phone line We’re doing our best to kill all the space in between Miles are immortal Unlike our dying love…

Submitted on 2004-12-30 13:35:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I don't think you need to make it longer. I'm in a long-distance relationship now, so I know what this is like (though I don't suppose our love is dying). I thought capitalizing phone was a little odd.

| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]

that was really powerful... your last line was amazaingly beautiful... I don't think it should be any longer.. your words made this piece perfect no matter what length you make it... great job

| Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]

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