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Teenage Mother

Author: Brownsdelight
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I just had to post this, it's a very old write, but well someone's eariler post just made some old feelings stir.

This is partialy a true write all except for the father leaving me, though we were apart for six years.

We are all but human and we are not safe from error, that is what life is about after all, lessons and gained wisdom.

Teenage Mother

She walks through the mall, catching all the eyes.
Don’t they know how rude it is to stare? Don’t they realize?
She holds her head high walking into the store.
Thinking “so what I'm a pregnant teen, to me there is much more.”
Inside the store the young girls at the counter snicker and stare.
She needs help with an item yet they act as though she's not there.
Fighting the urge to break down and cry,
she clears her throat. 'Excuse me. I need help' she replies.
She pays for her items and out the store she walks.
The child in her wanting to stick out her tongue at all the people who gawk.
An elderly woman walks by and shakes her head making the girl feel ashamed.
But do they know how much she is pained?
Do they really think she woke up one morning and said 'Hey I know I'll get knocked up! I'll even choose a father who will leave me!' no, she did not.
She was just curious of this thing called sex.
But uneducated about the facts, now she regrets.
She holds a 4.0 average; she used to be leader of cheer.
Now every one treats her like the plague, her friends no longer there.
At home she rubs her belly that continues to grow.
'Don't worry, I love you, and I'm not afraid to let it show.'
Here is this girl at the young age of sixteen,
who alone is going through this stressful thing.
No one asks her how hard it is. No one considers anything except that she is having an illegitimate kid.
If they only knew of the love in her heart,
and how this pregnancy has torn her whole world apart.
Maybe they would reach out and try to understand.
Just listen to her, reassure or hold her hand.
She knows she was wrong and lessons are now learned.
But why does everyone scorn and not feel concern?
How are they so quick with judgment, and sneers?
When love is all she wants and needs to comfort her fears.
So alone this girl is holding her own.
Wanting someone to listen who won't condone.
Her child she will teach not to judge or to shame.
But to learn, forgive and love all the same.

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  wow i thought this was an awesome poem! Everyone just sits there and stares but people know that they are staring... and its sad that the father left when he was part of it..
| Posted on 2005-01-19 00:00:00 | by grinninggashes | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a wonderful write! It had nice fluidity and rhythum. Being in high school I've seen pregnant girls and some of my friends with pregnancy scares. They do stick out and its a crying shame that society puts expectations on people based on their age. Nice job!
| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by kissingadict | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked this. I mean. A teenager pregnant. Sad, but its a FACT. Especially in today's world. Therefore, people need to be there for them instead of CONDEMNING them. I liked dthis a bunch.
| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  This was what was needed. We know why. I think you made a good statement with this. You got your point across of how it feels to be young and pregnant. Great job with this. Hope more read it.


P.s.- The line:

Now every one treats her like the plague, her friends no longer there.

I think it should end with "here".
| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  I think a child is even more blessed bi-racially, the beauty of it is multiple cultures and educationally it doesn't get any better. Too bad the world can't see it for what it is, beauty and colorful...bless you and you will be and have been blessed...Bob:)
| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi :)
I was a teenage Mum, my daughter is 30 now and I am 46. I joke with her and say that we could end up in the same Nursing home together! (hehe)
It's not easy is it but when I look at the older people having families I can see so many blessings growing up with your children, energy for a start! :)
I would not recomend it to the next teenager though, I think to have a longer childhood and more time to grow up without the responsibility of caring for another and always putting yourself second is an important time to have??
But then again I would not liked to have left it too late either?

Happy New Year! :)

Jess xx
| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by Jess | [ Reply to This ]
  That is sad. I think it is rude to stare at pregnant people, especially teenagers. I think its sad you lost your friends, and no one seems to care. But all you can do is be strong. Strong to yourself and your baby. Don't listen to other people, who critisize. I feel sorry for you that the father of the baby left too. Does anyone realize its not easy to raise a baby. Even at a young age. You must be a strong woman.
| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
  At home she rubs her belly that continues to grow.
'Don't worry, I love you, and I'm not afraid to let it show.

my first comment is I wish the above lines held true, in most cases the teen mother to be gets too caught up in what others think rather than realizing she has been blessed and one day will soon become a blessing to a beautiful living being...My second comment is Bang, you've shot me with a literary gem filled with reality, the picture was so clear, from start to finish, I felt her pain, you allowed me to follow her journey, in essence you made me pregnant, and I'm not even going to smoke afterwards, a great write and I loved it, please pass it to as many teens as I will, cuz the important message is no matter what else is said, both children are the number one priority...Bob:)
| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
  So sad is this or any other young girl who makes this mistake, though their is understandable,because love and sensuality has made all of us look dumb at times. but what is unacceptable is how other people treat them,rather them help or at least offer a shoulder.

You did a great job as always.
| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  sad people go through this. i was with my cousin throughout her pregnancy because the "father" left her and the baby. i am so glad she found a better man who has taken her daughter into his life as if his own. so glad that he stayed with you** there are great men out there, just takes awhile to find them. great write**
| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
  This was sad, but a good write. I don't think it is right that people stare at you. I don't think that is right. No one should have to go through this. I am also sorry that you lost you friends and the father of the baby. That ain't right.
Good luck
| Posted on 2004-12-31 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
  i have to say that this is a very powereful poem. i am sure that you are a great mother and hope the best for you and your little child. it is a hard thing. i would like to aplaud you for keeping your little one far to mony abort them. i think it is great you took responsibility. great write. if you need anything let me know even if it is to talk i know it was a while ago but every one needs friends. lia
| Posted on 2005-01-02 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
  Another wow from my end. I can't relate to this, but it was one that really showed me the point of veiw. Very good. Again.
| Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by His Lost Angel | [ Reply to This ]
  a very poignant piece that deals with a heckuva lot of inner trauma and emotion, but also shows a lot of inner strength, and simple love for the child inside. reading through this piece i felt the way the poem rhymed and the flow of the poem were exceptional.society is always going to judge on appearences, even with all the information and intergration that we have now. hopefully we will evolve in time to see people as individuals one day though. thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by undecided | [ Reply to This ]

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