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    dots Submission Name: Suicidedots

    Author: Raven_s Miser
    ASL Info:    16-female- wap
    Elite Ratio:    4.64 - 68/54/18
    Words: 426
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    My poem is about many hardships that may happen due to a small or that of a major mis-hab.It shows that the character has realized the mistakes of others but has not yet to begin to understand the mistake she is about to make.
    She wants an appology but would rather be rash and walk away from the problem because that is how she saw it as a child and now as a adult that in her mind is the only way to handle the problem( referring to her father walking away from her mother). Now she doesn't want pitty or sorrow but just to stop everything that she can't handle even if she did or didn't start it.

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    dark secrets amongst the lies
    today would be the perfect day to die
    Don't look down oops it's to late today I shall test my fate.
    A final fall or a crawl of shame.
    Don't cry you put me up to this and now I hope you don't think I won't go throught with it.
    I feel that I will meet my doom and to me it applies that I will encounter it very soon.
    I have nothing to live for nothing to gain.
    The pain will die in an instant for it was only a freak incodent.
    Suicide I will and shall die today and no I won't have it any other way.
    To be set free of the pain you gave.
    Yo live my life my own way
    I won't slave to you from day to day.
    I stand atop the light lit city, waiting for you to push me.
    You made me come this far so seal the deal.
    You won't push so i won't jump.
    Are you scared now because I feel there is nothing to fear, and thus there is nothing to keep me here.

    I hold in my hand the sanity I once had.
    I cannot stan this life of lies and injustice anymore.
    For a final farewell you can tell mother good-bye and father nothing at all.
    For all others you will see whats left of me when they lay me down to rest.
    I won't hold back I won't resist.
    You can pick me up and put me down but as of now I know I will and shall have the last laugh.
    What it is that you were to say was said in vain. And for that i cannot take that all away but I still can pray that it all will change, that you willl change.
    Change because therefore you won't be there to see what you have come to be.

    if to kill oneself is a sin than i have wrong.
    But in my life I have been to do as I believe and because of that I shall now do as I please

    Leave me here to bleed.
    I won't see tomorrow or the artificial sorrow that you had lead me to believe is how you used to feel for me.
    Forgive me god for I have sinned. But as of then my story was just about to begin. But I myself am done forever more and I have left to be seen no more.

    samantha renaud

    Submitted on 2004-12-30 16:10:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Samm, you told me once to get out of the garbage can, now I'm telling you that its not the same, to be asamed you had to do something wrong, but you have done none. I liked it, its what I have been saying about myself for awhile now I just couldn't get it right. So it reminds me of me. It was very clear and I felt like it was me. But I know it was you. Its kind of original actually it is original but I have tried to write the same many times before. Anyways I liked it. You know me. what do you expect? You still messed up on your spelling though. lol
    | Posted on 2005-06-05 00:00:00 | by Restless_Heart | [ Reply to This ]
      okay i love ya joe ya know i do but i found your trademark... ya it was good but the SPELLING was alittle off that is your trademark

    ne ways thanks for commenting on my piece i really appreciate it

    | Posted on 2005-06-10 00:00:00 | by Raven_s Miser | [ Reply to This ]

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