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Dearest Teenager


Author: edthepoet
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I was truly inspired by Jesus to write this.

No teen should be hurting this much,nor feel he or she is unlovable.

I am not here to preach to anyone, rather to let anyone in pain known I will sit next to their pain and listen without strings or judgment

I want to thank Amanda personally for seeing the poem as it should be and for wanting to help other by sharing it,bravo


Dearest Teenager



Dearest Teenager

Its time to sit and talk
First, let me turn my light on
You've been in the dark too long

I am sorry that you feel so alone
You went from deep thoughts to deep cuts
The skin was meant to cover the blood
Not transverse

I know of blood spilling all to well
Those thick rusted nails
Held my Wrists so tight
Even I cried out in human form
Why have you forsaken me?

Hold my hand, while I read you the good book
Please take notice
No where on any pages
Is your name mentioned in blood

Heaven has no need for you now
Live your life the way you dream it should be
I have sent unknown poet to help you along
Who is but a stranger
None the less, he cares so much for you

Please take his advice
Use the ink as your blood
And give up your pain to me

When you do
I will make this promise to you
Your longing to be love shall come true

Signed Jesus through Edthepoet











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  My daughter is five and soon will be thriteen and I am ferarful of her sinking into some abyss that so many teens do. I can only hope that I am granted the wisdom to be able to convey my need to help at those times as well as you did here. Good Job.

IK
| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
  I was not into hurting myself as a teenager, so I cannot relate to the practice. I do see some very dark poems on this site and am glad you put your message out for teens to see. I once heard someone compare the mental state of a teenager to a mild form of insanity- too many hormones flowing through the brain. For what it's worth, I'm glad Jesus inspired you to write this.
| Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by Spare Change | [ Reply to This ]
  damn, i gotta thank you for this. i couldn't have stumbled across this at a better time. i'm kind of at the point where i'm just feeling real low. even though i know i have people that love me, i can't seem to understand why... i don't cut though, the sight of blood makes me squeamish so... but this was truly a beautiful poem...
| Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  all I have to say is God Bless you and all you do. You have reached out a hand that has so many times been forgotten by many teens today. I say keep it up and you are an inspriation to me and I hope many others . Thank you.
| Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by ThatWasOnceMe | [ Reply to This ]
  Damn Ed! You really have a heart! Glad someone took the time to write to these teenagers with the cutting issues. You said it better than all. Jesus is the answer. Every time I think that you have outdid yourself, you prove me wrong....


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| Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmm... I saw some typo errors, but meh... who cares.

I know many, many, many, many, etc., teens (one of the my best friend) who think that life is the worst thing in the world. They think that where they live and who they know affects how much they hate themselves. But the truth is, no matter where you go or what you do, or who you meet, if you believe that your life sucks that much... it still will. Basically.

But I think adults don't give us much credit. Not saying you, because from this piece, you obviously understand us very much, but I mean...

I was an eighth grader last year and life was great.

Now, only 8 or so months later, I'm worrying about my grades, college, driver's ed, car insurance, projects, I'm working myself to death with all the work I do that I don't have to. I also want to get a job as soon as I turn 16, and I'm always thinking about my friend(s) moving away and us never seeing each other again.

All that within not even a year.

But, I love my life, and I love myself (which is a good thing) and I love my school, friends, and everything I do. I wouldn't change a thing... as in I wouldn't change the stationary things you can't. I have straight A's and I understand things and I have good friends, so some would say I have it easy... but yet again, about 90% of those people are the ones who overdramatize the problems in their life. I have problems too, but I don't use them as excuses to go around making people feel sorry for me.


Okay... whew... now that I got that out... I think you already know what I got out of this. I think that's the most thought I've gotten from a poem. Good job. Ha.


Jen
| Posted on 2005-04-02 00:00:00 | by poetofthenight | [ Reply to This ]
  This was incredible. I have friends who have or do cut, and there have been times when I have been tempted to, but haven't. This is a serious issue, straight from hell, and it needs to be addressed. You did a wonderful job of communicating Jesus' love through this piece, and it did not seem preachy at all. I'm so glad that you listened to your Lord and allowed Him to speak through you. Wonderful and inspiring.
| Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
  Ed - my friend, you so ROCK. Funny that comment coming from a 40 something to another, but it speaks exactly my awe. I am honored to have known you here, and I thank you for your truly magnificant work. I will use this piece with my sons, it says what I have a hard time saying. THANK YOU
| Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
  I for some reason felt compelled to check out what you have on here. This one caught my eye. When I read it I wanted to cry. I am Pagan but even with that this touched my heart. Dear Teenager-hmmm sounds interesting. Then BAM! it's serious and I can connect. I never slit my wrists, I didn't need that to mutilate myself but I came close, many a time. I know what it's like and this is really an inspiring poem for someone still searching. Luckily I found what I was looking for. Great job.

Blessed Be!
| Posted on 2005-03-10 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
  wow, this is an incredible piece. i liked the way that you delievered such a profoud message. it is truely sad to see some youngsters today get so caught up in the desperate feelings as if there is no escape. i have worked closely with kids, and i LOVE it. the best way to get their attenttion has always been for me is to let them in on my "little secrets" its so personal when they feel you are entrusting them with some great amazing thing. which is what you have done here! great poem.
| Posted on 2005-02-17 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
  I hate to say this but this poem is honestly the best one othe than my favorites poem that I've read so far. I like it. A lot. I don't think I have ever read anything so inspiring before. Makes me think of at least on of my poems that I've written but still haven't put on here. I'm adding this to my favorites list.
| Posted on 2005-02-06 00:00:00 | by manda_bear | [ Reply to This ]
  this is excellent. i love this poem. it is true to form however i do no know if i have faith in god or not. So i dont know if the jesus thing works for me.
| Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by leanne | [ Reply to This ]
  im having trouble with my faith and my emotions, and this is just what i need to hear. so thanks ed, jesus...whatever. this was really meaningful for me. my favorite line:
Its time to sit and talk
First, let me turn my light on
You've been in the dark too long
-it just seems so creative to me. and you know a poems good when the first few lines want to bring you to tears. great job, ed. take care.
truly yours,
birdy
| Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by birdy5005 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, I have never seen so many comments on something like this. It's truly amazing though. Once again, you help me to cross the line, back to the real world, and learn to teach us to stop. To stop all the pain and hurt, to understand our lives. You pulled me and many others I see, through a hole. It's like a pathway from hell, straight to heave, but it's heaven on earth, so even trhough there are some problems, we cannot solve, even if we stick together, though you have made a difference in our lives. A way to better the world, and I think you probable stopped quite a few of us from doing something deadly that we were just about ready to do.

So..I must thank you. . . .
Amy
| Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by Chicool2 | [ Reply to This ]
  A powerful message and one that needs to be read by as many people as possible. You are addressing a very serious problem with great care and tenderness. Through your words flows a pure invitation to salvation and forgiveness and a keen understanding of the pain self abusers go through on their lonely journey of hurting and crying out for attention.
Magnificently written and a profound message delivered.
| Posted on 2004-12-31 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
  Cutting is a serious problem facing more and more teens today (I should know). Your poem conveys with awesome simplicity the torment these young adults are suffering emotionally and mentally, and provides insight without seeming too "preachy," as you said. Terrific piece. I suggest you submit this work where it would reach the eyes of more teens.
| Posted on 2004-12-31 00:00:00 | by Lady Tragedy | [ Reply to This ]
  I think that's great that Jesus 'spoke' to you to write this. That's how I got it anyway. Hopefully you'll reach the teens that really need this. :) It's very inspirational to those who are in pain like this. Great job.
-blt
| Posted on 2004-12-31 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
  wow, this made me cry! I do think that Jesus inspired you to write this! thank you for posting it.. It helped me to remember to turn to Jesus when I feel like cutting. I have been dealing with it a lot lately, and it's a really strange addiction. I will refer everyone that is cutting themselves to this poem, it is very powerful. Hope you have a great new year!
~Amanda
| Posted on 2004-12-31 00:00:00 | by AmandaLyn | [ Reply to This ]
  i have to say that this is true for any one just to give them hope they dont have to belive excactly what you do . but anyways i think that this was a great write and really enjoyed the words you used. great work ive added you to my fav list lia
| Posted on 2005-01-01 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
  sorry i forgot. i think that all the teens that are on this site that write about cutting (which means that they are dilling with a friend that is doing it or is doing it themselves) should read this and maybe they will beable to seek help from someone. lia
| Posted on 2005-01-01 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
  wowerz! that is so so powerful...I wish my sis could have heard that when she was having problems! Thankyou for those words... more than just being inspired, they are inspiring. Great Work man! God Bless You!
-Shawn
| Posted on 2005-01-02 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]
  What a powerful and mature peice you have here. There are some grammar errors, but those are easily fixed. You managed to capture such raw eomtions, you are very talented that way. I am just in awe of this peice that I have nothing more to say except for BRAVO!
*Amanda*
| Posted on 2005-01-02 00:00:00 | by fortressofwords | [ Reply to This ]
  hey, when I was reading this i just noticed a few things that could have made this read a little easier... Hope you're ok with this.. :)


Dearest Teenager

Its time to sit and talk
First, let me turn my light on
You* been in the dark too long (You've)

I am sorry that you feel so alone
You went from deep thoughts to deep cuts
The skin was meant to cover the blood
Not transverse

I know of blood spilling all to well
Those thick rusted nails
Held my wrist* so tight (Wrists)
Even I cried out in human form
Why have you forsaken me?

Hold my hand, while I read you the good book
Please take notice
No* where on any pages (nowhere)
Is your name mention* in blood (mentioned)

Heaven has no need for you now
Live your life the way you dream it should be
I have sent unknown poet to help you along
Who is but a stranger
None the less, he care* so much for you (cares)

Please take his advice
Use the ink as your blood
And give up your pain to me

When you do
I will make this promise to you
Your longing to be love* shall come true (loved)

Sign* Jesus through Edthepoet (signed)




Sorry of this offends you, but I couldn't help myself, I'm the editor of a newspaper, so I always correct people's mistakes... Still LOVE this poem though! hope you have a great day!
~Amanda

| Posted on 2005-01-02 00:00:00 | by AmandaLyn | [ Reply to This ]
  wooohoooo! FINALLY someone that says something about (what we've been talking about).

This was a very powerful write and I hope and will pray that many if not all of the seemingly depressed teens here will read this. bravo friend bravo!
| Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  edthepoetman this is so beautiful... really... i love the non judgmental tone of this... i can both see and feel the inspiration of Christ in this. the part about the bleeding... the nails... the blood... the pain... WOW! you know... that is the most amazing way of looking at it ever.
ive been challenged of late to remember that Christ was also a man... you know how we say we're only human as an excuse for when we stuff up... jesus was only human too at one stage... hmmm... so yup...
anyways back to your write... the compassion in here is brilliant... your heart is gorgeous and your offer is so sacrificial but so loving too...
you know... i could keep talking all day but really all i need to say is bless you millions... it is awesome to see God moving through you and your pen... keep up the brilliant work!
| Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  You really made a break through with this one. People really liked it. As do I. I got chills while reading this. It is great that Jesus could inspire you to write this. you opened your heart and mind and gave your hand for Jesus to use. Great job with this. I hope that it helps many of the troubled people that are on this sight.

Alicia
| Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  Even as an 'anti-christian' teen this poem still touched my heart. You did an awesome job with this Ed, although I am worried that Jesus was talking to you and telling you to write peotry...
| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
  i like the idea of it. it's a very good topic to talk about because it seems like no adult really acknowledges what happens. i like the way you worded things and the metaphors you used. good job <3
| Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Lemmy | [ Reply to This ]
  It's a good thought to write about. and a very orginal way to present the idea.Although, I personally do not think that the bible can cure everything.
| Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by DreamInColour07 | [ Reply to This ]


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