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    dots Submission Name: " You Never"....dots
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    Author: Raven_s Miser
    ASL Info:    16-female- wap
    Elite Ratio:    4.64 - 68/54/18
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       for feed back i want any form of commentary that you might have.The piece I wrote was about my sister and how she went throuogh an abusive realtionship with her husband.
    And she wanted out so bad but there was so much to be lost because of her son.
    she didn't want to take away his father but didn't want him to hurt her child either.
    This best expresses the thoughts that went through her head when this all happened. And letting people know she did what she thought was best not for herself but for others


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    dots" You Never"....dots
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    You never see the truth,
    How it's depth is to the root.

    You never want to critisise,
    but now she cries
    "Alone".

    Alone in that solitude which to her is and never will be lonlieness.

    Because when it's all said and done
    she'll be the only one.

    The only one to breath the blood that once trickled down her face,
    Then vanished without a trace.

    Without a trace of sorrow or fear you knew the tears were near.

    They were near and you were far.

    Her memories drag on for miles and will soon drag her down.

    Farther than the extent of repair,
    to her nobody ever really cared.

    They never cared that she was there for all to see.
    Now she's gone... gone so free,
    You never cared so why should she?

    She won't look back on your sad story
    if it was so great then why didn't it make history?

    You see her fait was meant to be, but only you were the one that couldn't see.

    You never looked back upon the past,
    and even if you did it wouldn't last.
    You broke the trust that was made of glass,
    and pushed me away without one last glance.
    You never deserved the truth, because it was all to much,
    Even thought it had a gentle touch.

    Look at what truth did to me and only you would be blind if you couldn't see.....
    "that it was never about me".

    Samantha Renaud




    Submitted on 2004-12-31 11:55:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Abusive relationships. Ugh. This is a great testimony of what it is like to be invovled in such an affair, but removed, as in the case of siblings. This tragedy affects and infects everyone involved, and noone can deny its wrath. Everyone who has a loved one in this terrible circumstance knows the crushing force of its weight, all you can do is try to be there for your loved ones and try to help without hurting. This can be hard to do, but it is what must be done if anything is to be done about the situation. It is pure agony to know that your loved ones are living it, but the truth is you are living it as well, and so are your children if you don't keep it from them. All in all great testimony, sorry to hear about this all happening to your family, best wishes and thank you sincerely, -sinmore
    | Posted on 2004-12-31 00:00:00 | by sinmore | [ Reply to This ]
      This was heart-wrenching. My heart goes out to your sister. Been here done this many a time. Read my piece "Documented Proof" if you ever have time. I have quite a few poems on this topic. But, good grief. She's in my thoughts and prayers and you captured all the emotions in a beautifully, tragically, haunting piece.
    ~BCute
    | Posted on 2004-12-31 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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