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    dots Submission Name: Shadows Of Lovedots
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    Author: DarkenedSoul
    ASL Info:    30/m/astral dreams
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 77/60/17
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsShadows Of Lovedots
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    The clock stopped and time stood still,
    for a moment the world stopped turning.
    Eyes meet for an eternity,captured within a few heartbeats.
    Each gazes at the others soul laid bare and naked.
    Their eyes touch each other like lovers in the night.
    The clock moves and time crashes through the moment,
    their eyes waver, the connection gone,
    and they awkwardly go their seperate ways
    wondering about that fleeting moment
    when they encountered... a shadow of love.




    Submitted on 2005-01-01 05:54:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      'time crashes through the moment'... I envy you that line... It ssems so... abrupt and frightening! It's almost like in The Labyrinth where Sarah breaks the mirror and her dreambubble pops... This could have easily turned out cliché, but you successfully avoided clichédom... Nice. Thanks for the read. *md*
    | Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading this. Such simple language portrays a beautiful image very nicely, and it really brings back feelings of when this event took place. I particularly like the last three lines because it describes me the most, and the use of "shadow of love" was just brilliant because to me, it says that you haven't encountered the full thing yet. Very nice poetry!
    | Posted on 2005-01-01 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the originals better so please stop rewritting them. It wouldn't hurt if you shared some of the not so dark poems you have..love ya.
    | Posted on 2005-01-01 00:00:00 | by wildheart | [ Reply to This ]



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