Description: I'm really proud of this poem. It's about insecurity, and how it can consume our lives and paralyze our spirit. Almost everybody spends half (if not more) of their time worrying what other people think, and only the truly brave admit to it.
The Five W's -------------------------------------------
who
am i trying to impress?
why
do i constantly feel
criticizing eyes boring into my unworthy
flesh?
what
kind of person do people
like more - the obviously flawless or
the flawed but content?
where
can i find solace and
is it free? for i love
a good bargain, don't you?
when
shall i lay myself down and
surrender to the insecurity
of just being me?
Hey there. People definatly do worry too much about what other people think. I like the concept of this piece as well as the thoughts you portrayed in it.
The only suggestions I have about it would be this; make sure that you capitalize "I" when you are talking about yourself. The formatting needs a little work. The way you broke up the lines made it a little difficult to follow. Other than that though, I see nothing wrong with this piece. Great work.
I must say, and I do hope this doesn't offend you, that you write well for someone your age. I've seen so many young writers fall into the trap of writing poetry that doesn't really say much. But you seem to have a lot to say and the capacity for words to say those things. Keep it up.
I agree with this message. Everyone worries about what other people think. Its reality. I mean I worry what other people think of me. I try not to. Buts it like, is my clothes in style, what if I go out with him, what will everyone say. There is lots of ?'s girls and guys ask theirselves what will peers think of them.
I like this, it shows a good message. It is true. Lot of people don't want to admitt but its true.
Submission Name: The Five W's
