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    dots Submission Name: paindots
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    Author: kc
    ASL Info:    16/f/Ill.
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 128/176/44
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    i cry out in pain
    each and every night
    these feelings inside
    are getting hard to hold in
    i try to talk about it
    but there's nothing i can say
    i don't know where this comes from
    i don't know where my pain comes from
    you want to take it all away
    but there's nothing you can do to help
    i can't let this out
    it has become a part of me
    this pain
    this aweful pain
    eats away at my insides
    it tears me apart
    it makes it hard for me to breathe
    i feel like i can't go on
    this pain makes it hard to wake each day
    this pain makes it hard to sleep at night
    this pain makes it hard
    and i'm not sure if i'm that strong
    i've been holding onto this for too long
    it's to the point that i can't live with it
    it's to the point that i can't live without it




    Submitted on 2005-01-01 17:46:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I completely understand the feeling behind this. Pain is one of the hardest human emotions to carry. And it's even harder to describe. Although our human instinct is to find a way to make the pain go away as quickly as possible, it is important to remember that it is pain that forces us to learn. And if we didn't learn then we wouldn't grow.

    Nice writing.
    | Posted on 2005-01-01 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]
      i hope that you can feel a little better now that you are writing about the pain maybe you should write more about this pain so you can figure out what it is and how people can help you. maybe writeing will be the way to get the pain to leave. anyways good ecpresion i only have a few suggestions correction of spelling for one word. other than that keep working on geting the pain out. lia

    I cry out in pain
    each and every night
    these feelings inside
    are getting hard to hold in
    I try to talk about it
    but there's nothing I can say
    I don't know where this comes from

    I don't know where my pain comes from

    you want to take it all away
    but there's nothing you can do to help
    I can't let this out
    it has become a part of me
    this pain
    this awful pain
    eats away at my insides
    it tears me apart

    It makes it hard for me to breathe
    I feel like I can't go on
    this pain makes it hard to wake each day
    this pain makes it hard to sleep at night
    this pain makes it hard

    Iím not sure if Iím that strong
    Iíve been holding onto this for too long
    it's to the point that I can't live with it
    it's to the point that I can't live without it
    | Posted on 2005-01-01 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      one spelling error. typical adolescent angst style writing but if it helps you out then keep writing! there's nothing a person can say to you that will help you cope, these are things you only find yourself but if you stick things out, you'll find good things in life...not alot of good things...but there are some....
    | Posted on 2005-01-01 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]


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