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    dots Submission Name: Auroradots
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    Author: VanillaLeaves
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 101/110/23
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I watch the sunrise this morning and this poem came from the first part of the sunrise. Afterwards it got really pretty and I felt kind of bad about writing it, but nevertheless here it is.


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    dotsAuroradots
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    Dawn, beaten from overuse and exhaustion
    hangs in burnt strips from the sky,
    a victim of ink and graphite swords,
    the weapons of far too many poets.
    for ages they have seized you, Aurora, with words,
    tried to paint your rose and your violet,
    but only succeeded in bleaching you
    the color of thick clouds at midday.

    You have been given so many names,
    Rosy-Fingered Dawn,
    who smears blood stained hands across the sky
    and beats against the blue walls of her prison.
    Golden Dawn, Clear dawn, New Dawn
    titles heaped upon you
    like so many pieces of cold metal
    and still you are nameless,
    a picture that shines for children
    only to fade into the concrete side walks
    leaving no warmth to remember.

    I watch you rise from a filthy mattress
    hidden in some dank room on Olympus
    and spread across the horizon like a new bruise.
    Each day I see you stagger up into the heavens
    and lie down on the beaten sky path, waiting for Apollo’s chariot
    to trample you into shreds of ultra violet and tattered ozone




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      You must be an artist yourself for having such colorful expression, that, or just a wonderful sense of imagination. Its imagery was a little darker this time, I like that. great work
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by laniejane | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a bit different from your usual mood, Emily, it's almost a criticism, I felt some cynicism and disdain in the background. I almost get the feeling that you put the daily spectacle on a pedestal that defies description by mere mortals.
    As usual, you descriptions are excellent, and belie the poem's own words that poets come nowhere near the mark in decribing the pre-dawn aurora (even that word is beautiful)
    I liked this lots, well done
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-26 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      What a painting! You have done such a good job of coloring with words. I could almost see the dawn, and then you'd change it again, just like the sunrise changes. Thanks for giving it back the mystical, mythical feel the early morning holds for some of us.
    Thanks for sharing,
    -Chell-
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      what a beautiful poem! the imagery is wonderful and your words are so unique, as is the poem itself. you have a special talent. I have no suggestions for improvement. great job.
    | Posted on 2005-01-01 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]


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