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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 829
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    Description:
       THis was written in a guys point of view.


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    stains on your heart
    like I was ever really there
    scars embedded in your mind
    like you ever really cared

    and like I smoke this bloody cigarette
    I am filled with you
    a smoky haze of guilt that I have come back to this place

    suicide girl
    you know I never will forget you
    living in your own world
    you know it could of worked out

    she painted the blood on her stupid cigarette
    she cured my pain and I never will
    forget

    stains on your heart
    like I was ever really there
    scars embedded in your mind
    like you ever really cared




    Submitted on 2005-01-02 04:06:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very well written. I like the words you used. My favorite part was when you put
    Stains on your heart
    Like I was ever really there
    Scars embedded in your mind
    Like you ever really cared.
    It explains so much just with these lines. This is very good. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-02-07 00:00:00 | by sarahthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      Instead of "could of," it needs to be "could've." I like that this is written from a guy's perspective. I often do that, but I don't tell people I'm doing it. It's fun to see if anyone figures it out.
    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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