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The sole's tightly in tack

Author: painofthanatos
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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long distance relationships suck

The sole's tightly in tack

"You're the only shoe that fits
Can't imagine I'll grow out of it" -S.B.H.
Sure it seems a bit out of style
In this small little town
But it's worn in just right
It knows how I move
It's seen where I've been
Yet It's grip hasn't gone slack
The sole's tightly in tack
As it races through the miles
Hugging on tightly
As it brings me closer to you

Submitted on 2005-01-02 12:24:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  How precious. Long distance relationships do suck, but at the same time I love em. I luv this piece. It needs a little work with the puncuation though, but other than that, its great. Keep up the good work.

| Posted on 2005-01-02 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  that was even better than the last one... you puncuation was a alittle rought but who cares. I'm not here to judge your puncuation... the lenght i though could have been adjusted.. butr otherwise you piece was great.
| Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]

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