The sole's tightly in tack

Author: painofthanatos Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 684 /571 /86 Words: 71

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The sole's tightly in tack

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"You're the only shoe that fits Can't imagine I'll grow out of it" -S.B.H. Sure it seems a bit out of style In this small little town But it's worn in just right It knows how I move It's seen where I've been Yet It's grip hasn't gone slack The sole's tightly in tack As it races through the miles Hugging on tightly As it brings me closer to you

Submitted on 2005-01-02 12:24:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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How precious. Long distance relationships do suck, but at the same time I love em. I luv this piece. It needs a little work with the puncuation though, but other than that, its great. Keep up the good work. Rain

| Posted on 2005-01-02 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]

that was even better than the last one... you puncuation was a alittle rought but who cares. I'm not here to judge your puncuation... the lenght i though could have been adjusted.. butr otherwise you piece was great.

| Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]

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