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    dots Submission Name: Kiss Away My Absinthe Tearsdots
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    Author: KrimsonReaper
    ASL Info:    26/M/Denver, CO
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 328/443/46
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Needless to say, I was a bit angry and completely devastated when I wrote this. I still miss her from time to time.


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    dotsKiss Away My Absinthe Tearsdots
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    Kiss away my absinthe tears
    with a cube of sugar between your teeth
    Bitter illusions washed sweetly down,
    And captured by a gentle thief.

    Paint me a puzzle of melted ice,
    laced with borrowed blood in the snow.
    Laughable longings held frozen by hope,
    Liquid now and poised to flow.

    Beat to dust my worthless fears
    with a ray of light clenched in your fist.
    No longer cowed by the night in your touch,
    For by morning I’ve been kissed.




    Submitted on 2004-03-23 18:59:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is absolutely fantastic. The force of imagery in this piece is just astounding. Gosh... It's extremely eloquent... The rhyme scheme is seemless... This is incredible. Keep on writing, man, or you'll be doing the world a great disservice.
    | Posted on 2004-08-03 00:00:00 | by Moose_Jive | [ Reply to This ]
      Each stanza a demand and a handrail to cling to: if it's being done to you it can't be done again.
    But the wording is of a time past and I read this through frosted glass.
    I was almost as sad as you when it finished.
    And Annie sang 'Tomorrow'...
    Hasta,
    K
    | Posted on 2004-05-09 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      This was one of the best poems that I've read from your writting, not saying your others arn't so good, because there great too, but this ones probably the best...Keep writing
    | Posted on 2004-04-02 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful images and an amazing secound stanza. I can juat repeat the others cause it's true.
    | Posted on 2004-03-24 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      You make a drink sound like the some beautiful exotic woman that takes away your cares... beautiful imagery.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      So elegant,---Wormwood spirits cleanse the wounds, purging pain --you sleep with dreams drenched with the essence of the icy green opal---twist gently the kaleidoscope at dawn. Beautiful, a Fave Silver
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      I really loved the second stanza... this was written so well.
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      your fan club below me will lick your feet if you let them. :)

    absinthe, even its colour has envy. i will mark the board with every shot i take and slither to ground with no sound. i like how illusions wash away with an aid. like grounding tulip bulbs with a spade. they will never blossom, digesting on the way into dirt...stolen by Dissection and Analytic, those two wreak havoc, when no one asked them 'what of it.'

    i like the first line. but i am like that. first things first. everytime for the first time.

    ghost.


    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by myghostsliketotravel | [ Reply to This ]


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