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    dots Submission Name: Jamesdots
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    Author: codysangel
    ASL Info:    18/f/ky
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 29/38/12
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       this poem was wrote about a guy i thought i would end up marryin....i guess it just wasn't meant to be^-^


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    dotsJamesdots
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    I know how happy he makes me when we're together
    His daughter, Abby, could be mine one day
    He works hard to support his little girl
    James is a loving young man
    He tries hard to be nice to everyone
    How he laughs when he finds something funny
    Why he acts the way he does
    I know I love him more than anything in the world

    I know he holds me close when we're together
    He likes to gently kiss me
    He tries his best to be there for me
    How he sleeps at night
    He likes to go mudding on the weekends
    Hunting is his life
    Going to church means alot to him
    I know I love him more than anything in the world

    I know being together is what makes us happy
    A wedding will eventually be planned
    A life together is what I would like
    Spending each second together is what he wants
    His red Dodge Dakots is HIS truck
    At one every morning he goes to work
    James is loud and crazy
    I know I love him more than anything in the world

    My family and friends, I know he's the one I want for life
    He is caring, sweet and very loving
    James means a lot to me
    I know I love him more than anything in the world




    Submitted on 2005-01-03 09:47:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i think you could re-structure this for greater impact by losing all the "I know"s.

    I know how happy he makes me...
    His daughter, Abby, could be mine one day.
    He works hard to support this little girl...

    see what i mean? sounds like an upstanding dude.
    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with magnicat that you need to restructure the I knows. They make it too repetative. Lucky James Aaron. Have you shown this to him?
    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]


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