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    dots Submission Name: It Waitsdots
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    Author: the apocrypha
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 185/192/48
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       ...and eventually you're tired of always thinking about the same thing.


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    dotsIt Waitsdots
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    Denying
    You
    Every time
    I think of you
    I'm denying
    To think
    I can live without you

    But once past
    The first few weeks
    How long will it last
    Before we are too weak
    To last
    Once past
    LOVE
    Shattered to bits
    Blurred like a dream

    I only wish it had all mattered
    To my eyes since I have no ambition
    To retaliate




    Submitted on 2005-01-03 13:03:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i have to say that i really like your style and it is really diffrent from everything ealse you read on this site. you can take an unoriginal topic and really make it your own great work keep them comeing lia
    | Posted on 2005-02-06 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your style. Yet again, the way you have expressed your thoughts and poem's purpose through a distinct style and choice of words amazes me. I love the flow of this.
    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Redstarr | [ Reply to This ]
      i would have to agree with Redstarr. Your style is very distinct, and so are your choice of words. As far as the technical stuff goes, this was a good write. It didn't rhyme that well, but we all know that poems don't always have to rhyme! All and all, I liked the flow...good work!
    all the best!
    -Shawnothan
    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]


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