It Waits

Author: the apocrypha Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 185 /192 /48 Words: 66

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It Waits

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Denying You Every time I think of you I'm denying To think I can live without you But once past The first few weeks How long will it last Before we are too weak To last Once past LOVE Shattered to bits Blurred like a dream I only wish it had all mattered To my eyes since I have no ambition To retaliate

Submitted on 2005-01-03 13:03:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i have to say that i really like your style and it is really diffrent from everything ealse you read on this site. you can take an unoriginal topic and really make it your own great work keep them comeing lia

| Posted on 2005-02-06 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]

I love your style. Yet again, the way you have expressed your thoughts and poem's purpose through a distinct style and choice of words amazes me. I love the flow of this.

| Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Redstarr | [ Reply to This ]

i would have to agree with Redstarr. Your style is very distinct, and so are your choice of words. As far as the technical stuff goes, this was a good write. It didn't rhyme that well, but we all know that poems don't always have to rhyme! All and all, I liked the flow...good work! all the best! -Shawnothan

| Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]

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