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It Waits


Author: the apocrypha
Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 185 /192 /48
Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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...and eventually you're tired of always thinking about the same thing.


It Waits



Denying
You
Every time
I think of you
I'm denying
To think
I can live without you

But once past
The first few weeks
How long will it last
Before we are too weak
To last
Once past
LOVE
Shattered to bits
Blurred like a dream

I only wish it had all mattered
To my eyes since I have no ambition
To retaliate




Submitted on 2005-01-03 13:03:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i have to say that i really like your style and it is really diffrent from everything ealse you read on this site. you can take an unoriginal topic and really make it your own great work keep them comeing lia
| Posted on 2005-02-06 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
  I love your style. Yet again, the way you have expressed your thoughts and poem's purpose through a distinct style and choice of words amazes me. I love the flow of this.
| Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Redstarr | [ Reply to This ]
  i would have to agree with Redstarr. Your style is very distinct, and so are your choice of words. As far as the technical stuff goes, this was a good write. It didn't rhyme that well, but we all know that poems don't always have to rhyme! All and all, I liked the flow...good work!
all the best!
-Shawnothan
| Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]


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