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    dots Submission Name: High Schooldots
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    Author: grinninggashes
    ASL Info:    17/f/from sumwhere :)
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 154/124/25
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 850
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1147



    Description:
       this is just what almost every girl goes through in high school and it sucks


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    dotsHigh Schooldots
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    Through modern changes when little girls turn into teenagers
    A change is formed as the tight bonds they mend together wiht best friends swiftly dissolves
    And friendly snickers turn into harsh remarks and unfriendly giggles

    Pms can't be blamed for the treatment they uphold.
    Their bitchy attitudes can only be blamed on themselfs. Their immaturity will slowly drift away as time surpasses by and they may realize the pain they cause among the innocent.

    Their actions cannot be human for it is an evil creature that tortures girls as they stand by and get tormented by the non apealing beast as it continues to taunt lives
    even if they scream out for help.

    No one fully understands why these adolecent teenagers wtih angelic faces can turn so evil in a blink of an eye. Unknown forces seem to take over their precious minds and turn them against themself and anyone else that seems to matter.

    One day these prissy young girls will change their ways. Untill then let them live on in a hateful world. One day the treatment they gave they will receive.




    Submitted on 2005-01-03 13:48:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Perhaps it's my age (lol) but I just couldn't grasp the full meaning behind this write. I'm not saying it is not good but there wasn't enough in this to let all readers comprehend/relate.
    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I can understand this maybe because I'm in high school with a bunch of chicks like that. I really like this piece and hopefully they will get their due.
    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by ria_pixie | [ Reply to This ]


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