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    dots Submission Name: Get Your Shit Off My Lawndots
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    Author: Munchie_1226
    ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831/1834/185
    Words: 293
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 346
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1752



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    dotsGet Your Shit Off My Lawndots
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    What the hell were you thinking?
    That I really wouldn’t find out?
    I guess you proved that I was stupid.
    Stupid for trusting you with no doubt.

    How dirty can you possibly be?
    To go sleeping around with whomever you please.
    If you wanted to cheat I would only expect,
    She be prettier, not look like a sleaze.

    I’d expect for her to be better then me.
    Have a better job, with better pay, maybe a nicer car.
    Not to be barely 18,
    Someone that you just happened to pick up at the bar.

    Not someone that doesn’t have a job,
    Doesn’t even know how to iron her clothes.
    Doesn’t know how to brush her hair.
    Or get a pedicure for her nasty toes.

    But hey that’s all you, you allowed me to see.
    How much I truly meant to you.
    How much you appreciated the woman I am.
    How much you respected all that I did for you.

    I gave you one chance at the beginning of it all.
    I told you not to expect many more.
    You didn’t believe that statement I guess.
    You thought it was something you could ignore.

    How does it feel to come home late at night.
    Wanting so badly to just go to bed.
    You pull in the driveway and look around.
    Only to see your belongings outside instead.

    Your clothes, your games, your DVD’s,
    Even your stereo, speakers and shoes.
    I hope you then realized you were out for good.
    This was the path you chose to choose.

    So goodbye I wish you well.
    Please get your shit off of my lawn.
    For you and me are no longer “us”,
    From you I have completely withdrawn.




    Submitted on 2005-01-03 17:08:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      cheating really is the greatest insult, isn't it? you just can't believe someone would stoop that low- cheating is so fu<king sleazy- i can't stand it- you go, munchie- gotta take a stand. right on, grrrl. *md*
    | Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      *clap clap clap* Go,girl! Some guys are just [censored]s who need to be taught a lesson.

    Nice write,nice rhyme,nice flow. Good one! :)
    | Posted on 2005-01-13 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      still lmfao at the title!
    I know some people will say that this isn't structured very well, but me knowing what I know I think this is an excellent vent!

    ewww gross nasty toes lol girl i say you send her a gift certificate for the salaon~ hehehehehe

    I just came up with one too. peep game when you can it needs more work so maybe we can calab on it. hit me up tomorrow sis.

    ps I still think he should of had one last meal, to give him strength for all that gathering he had to do! lmao!
    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I know you're supposed to be venting, but I just had to laugh. A guy comes home to find his stuff on the lawn and a note saying get your sh*t off my lawn, thats just priceless. Now what you wrote was awesome, I just might have to make it a fav. I can't think of anything to say but awesomeness in a box of rice krispies with a light sprinkle of sugar!
    ~Paco!
    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Paconess1006 | [ Reply to This ]
      Isn't this great, you have room for my stuff now,lol What a totally awesome written piece about breaking your trust and thinking if your gonna do it, don't go looking for a nickel when you got a dime at home. that was from song.

    You took a very serious subject and mixed in some humor, never for one second was the message weaken along the way.

    Great write
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      lol im sure there is a story behind this but yaeh great poem id hate to be the guy that lost a good girl then come home and fingin all my stuff on the lawn lol i bet his face was priceless
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by grinninggashes | [ Reply to This ]



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