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    dots Submission Name: The Fatal Love Tangodots
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    Author: Paconess1006
    ASL Info:    16/M/Charlotte, NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 99/126/46
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 323
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       Its an all consuming dance, it takes away your most precious moments into one everlasting moment, forever dancing the love in your heart. Also for that special lady of mine.


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    dotsThe Fatal Love Tangodots
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    The first nervous step on the floor
    the natural cosmic principles pull you in
    preparing you to meet face to face.

    Take my hand, tossed to and fro
    pick you up
    won't let you know until I go,
    spinning around
    won't let you down,
    Until all the people know.

    Contageous inflations of ego
    explode from beneath
    Fine, unwind, prepare the fire underneath your feet,
    I'll catch you nigh
    you've flown too high
    but not enough that I can't reach.

    Alluring drumbeats count one two three four,
    the love it just won't stop.
    on measure 54, take one more, repeat until they drop.
    The salsa flavor spices up the night,
    with a one two right
    and a three four left elongates the flight.

    Around you soar, around you coast
    away do angels fly,
    I know, I'm sure, no need to boast, no need to lie
    for the timing just got right
    jazzy brasses, funky basslines
    the Fatal Love Tango, its outta sight, oh yes I'll be just fine.

    Just dizzy from the experience, tired from the motion
    aching from the bliss.
    Heartbeat pounding all sounding like nothing to miss.
    Sit down, think a minute, breathe a little bit
    breezes seem to glide over me
    but wait a tick, this dance will be the death of me.

    The first nervous step on the floor
    gravity of the angels held you in
    for what surely was your downfall, was your saving grace.




    Submitted on 2005-01-03 19:39:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this one ... i think its because i have always dreamed of losing my breathe in some super romantic dance and everyhting ends happily ever after... sigh.. who hasnt though. and thats exactly why this piece is good . eveyrone can relate to that feeling of excitment and nervous hyper energy and the dance is just so passionate ... wonderful absolutely wonderful.
    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi, you make anyone want to dance with this piece, it was airy, whimsical and sincere. You made the voice so happy in this poem,by simply enjoying a nightout dancing. Good write

    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your use of imagery it really gives this piece a sense of life. You seem so passionate in your writing and it truly shows through. How long have you been writing? Your style reminds me of some of my pieces. I espeacially liked the lines:
    Contageous inflations of ego
    explode from beneath
    Fine, unwind, prepare the fire underneath your feet,
    I'll catch you nigh
    you've flown too high
    but not enough that I can't reach.

    I hope you keep up the good work and get a chance to check out some of my work. I look forward to reading more of yours too.
    | Posted on 2005-01-03 00:00:00 | by Thornful Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the flow this poem has. Start,stop,start,something like that. Reading it was a pleasure. Except a little spelling error,in which it should have been 'contagious'. Sorry,I'm nitpicky about spelling and such. :)
    Nice write. Dance on...
    | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]



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