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    dots Submission Name: The Fooldots
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    Author: BuryThisLie
    ASL Info:    18/Male/Virginia...
    Elite Ratio:    4.77 - 17/22/5
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Dont read too much into it... and i just want ideas... dont attack me on gramer... thanx.


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    dotsThe Fooldots
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    The fool always comes first
    followed by a procession of magic
    and all seeing or all owning.
    Lovers come to a sixth,
    with love abound reverberating their tainted screams.
    A chariot careens out of control
    as justice is vindicated.
    The hermit in silence
    sees the wheel turn;
    And strength goes to the hanged man.
    Death comes before temperance
    and holds the key to the tower.
    The star ntices the moon's drawing gaze
    while the sun awakens judgement...
    In a world
    where a fool
    always comes first.




    Submitted on 2005-01-03 21:12:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The Fool has always been my favorite card, representing myself in so many ways, innocent, untouched by experience and a bit unrealisti at times. Very nice poem, I look for more.

    Peace,
    lori_tab
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting take on the Tarot. i like the Fool best in the deck. that would be me, falling off the cliff. it's interesting how you link the Major Arcana of the deck the way you do. that takes some pondering! shouldn't it be "all knowing" instead of "all owning?"

    write on!
    | Posted on 2005-01-17 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      very good piece of work you did there my friend.. although i didn't get the complete idea of the poem but from what i can see its very deep and tackles several things.. but you are doing a great job , welcome to eliteskills
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, you can tell that it had thought...if that makes sense, a burst of thoughts drawn together, it's cool..If you don't understand what I'm saying don't worry, I'm a very confusing person I don't even understand me most of the time .
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like it and i feel the meaning of the poem and it's has a strong pull to draw me in. Good work keep it up. It just speaks to me in ways I want poems to speak to me.
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Redman12333 | [ Reply to This ]


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