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    dots Submission Name: chickensdots
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    Author: wildchild
    ASL Info:    19/f/northwest
    Elite Ratio:    4.48 - 307/268/27
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Comedy
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       i am so freakin tired. i haven't slept in 2 days and this stupid chicken thing comes into my head. ugh


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    My friends always say to me
    that I am afflicted with ADD

    There aren't many things that I can do
    because I get distracted by a fat cow's moo

    I think I should probably get some meds
    I'm on my way out, oh look! bunk beds!

    Jumping up and down I forget what I'm doing
    ..............................................

    I have a t-shirt, it's black and blue
    Don't look at me, I ain't gonna give it to you

    Bon's got a sticker in her room
    to see it you have to turn on the zoom

    Bright yellow and bolded black
    it proclaims CHICKENS! all over the back

    I love chickens, I really do
    even though, they do give out a lot of poo

    I also really love my life
    oh look! a butcher knife!

    I'm running around with it in my fist
    stumbling and falling through the mist

    This is getting kinda old
    so I won't end in bold

    Hmm, I think it's time to give up the ryhme
    I know what your saying, "God it's about time!"




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      Entertaining.

    Sounds like you got bored or something. Lol, I always right serious dark poems, never any funny, and I like hearing one that makes me have a good laugh.

    When I was looking at your poem list I was like:

    "Chickens? What the hell does this girl think she's writing about?!"

    Once again, I expected it to be corny. But it's cute and soooo funny!

    necrotic
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really REALLY funny. I highly enjoyed it. My friend has ADHD and she is talking to me then sees a butterflies and then starts talking about butterflies. haha People are so funny.
    anyways i really like the poem. hehe
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by WTF Zombies | [ Reply to This ]
      hiyas Jess,

    well what do you have here? haha funny one, hmmm ok when you are like this is say hide all the sharp silvery objects! haha this is funny I like the distractions in this piece. The partition of this piece is mysterious, why is 30 percent of the write above the dotted lines? Does that reflect something in the mind? as the comedy goes since it is extremely silly I think a lot of leeway can be extended as far as it making perfect sense, I mean, hell Alice In Wonderland at times didn’t make much sense; that in itself is part of the comedy. the usage of “aint”, “gonna”, “poo”, and “kinda” are cool it is consistent. There is something that does need correction that is “ryhme" that should be rhyme. Chickens huh? hehe I had a duck when I was a child living in Alaska and I tell you that was the oddest of pets to have and like chickens it crapped every damn where! I must say it is better to eat them then to have them as pets haha anyhow nice piece funny I like especially in the changes in the mind. Well done Jess,

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is cute, It wasn't extremely funny, but I did get a smile out of it. :P I think maybe you should go without sleep more often. Then I can read some more of your silly stuff. :D
    LeAnna
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      cute!

    i love the ryhme, and I like the part about bunk beds and butcher knives!




    funny, it reminds me of me...






    anyways, good write, im gonna check out that other wun of urz..
    ~CinnamonT~
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]
      You know, this gave me a good laugh. My little brother has ADHD, and he is SOOOO much like that it's not even funny. But you described it to a T. The thing that got me the most, that I thought was the best description was how you changed the subject constantly. I love it. It's completely true.

    As for the name, I think you should have opted for something that had to do with Focus or attention. But I do understand after reading it why you chose the chickens :)

    Great job, quite funny. I enjoyed the read~!

    *hugs a plenty*
    ~Avry~
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem was really funny but i hat e cows and chickens i have 500 fighting cocks bihind my house, my neighbors and cow are every where.
    This made me laugh though it seemed like a rant of some sort more then an actual poetic write. it was great to read though
    ACe
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
      Man Jess. Even before reading it I got distracted by all the periods. It was funny. Bonnie laughed at me. I think I might cry now. By the way [censored]! Leaving Kim all alone without any food when you told her that you would be here with food! Oh yeah I like the poem. Except the part about chickens
    | Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by Joqer | [ Reply to This ]
      hehe...this poem is crazy. Well it is nice to read something once in awhile that is just plain fun, instead of sad and what not. my fav. lines:

    I think I should probably get some meds
    I'm on my way out, oh look! bunk beds!

    I also really love my life
    oh look! a butcher knife!

    hehe.
    | Posted on 2005-01-17 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
      Mwahahahahaha, chicken lover. Jess look! a chicken. Knock knock! Emersom! hehehehehe. I love this poem.
    If you keep going like this I might have to show you up.
    Not even if I tried...
    My favorite part "Bon's got a sticker in her room
    to see it you have to turn on the zoom"
    Because I'm Bon, lol. Naw, great poem.
    Sista Bon-Bon
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
      Playful, wacky and insane! I haven't slept for two nights, and... hmm, it was a good thought, but now it's gone. Loved this.
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by bent | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved the fun about it, nice after a hellish day with a mad chick-"en"-hahaha. man i reaally needed this coz i am here trying to finish a story that aint even mine and its 10pm and i got an assignment and stuff tomoro, generally, thanks for the fun amd the rhyme.
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
      this was like being absolutely fu-cked on acid and ketamine. i can quite relate to the first two thirds of the piece, having had no sleep for 65 hours and not knowing your ar-se from your elbow.
    dissocitaive anaesthetic pathetic
    take care
    on1eday.co.uk
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by on1eday.co.uk | [ Reply to This ]
      Dear, I don't care what you say. I know you have ADD. Hello, I'm there! The chicken thing, but first the pink bird. Hello...There aren't any pink birds flying over our gym. Sorry, but there isn't! It's a good poem dear, it really is. Word of advice though, SLEEP! If you do, I will. Oh and don't forget my rings tomorrow.

    Luv ya,
    Hooker
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      I always get ideas for 'funny' poems when I can't sleep. Of corse, they never seem as funny in the morning as they did at 2 AM...

    "I also really love my life
    oh look! a butcher knife!"

    Raotfl! This poem totally activates the 2AM dizzy delirious part of my brain...
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ]


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