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What Am I Suppose to Do?

Author: painofthanatos
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Yeah...more rambling ranting...kind of redundant though...

What Am I Suppose to Do?

What am I suppose to do
When all the blue lines
Look like gold mines?
What am I suppose to do
When a CD case looks like a miracle waiting to happen?
What am I suppose to do
When I can't wash the dishes
Without hurting myself?
What Am I Suppose to do
When I can't touch you without
Feeling the hollow heart that beats inside?
What am I suppose to do
When all of the pain won't help me
To forget that I need you?

Submitted on 2005-01-04 13:57:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow... that is serious stuff. I like especially
"Feeling the hollow hear that beats inside" That is very vivid. You must really like that person. You say it is a rant, but it rants pretty well... I liked it...

| Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
  that doesn't sound like a rant hun... it sounds more like a prose if you ask me... well maybe a prose/poem. I don't know I'm not good at naming this stuff but if you ask me it was awesome.. courtney you always amaze me with your work... you the coolest... well next to me I suppose... so I guess were the coolest
| Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
  damn, short, but sweet...unfourtunatly, bitter's a great write, but dude, you can hear the pain...I liked the part:
"What am I supposed to do
When all of the pain won't help me"
That's really kool, and the closing verse just helps add to it...Great job.
| Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]

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