Description: This is for my best friend's brother. A D&D player, a family man, a hero. He died of smoke inhalation trying to save his three children. To this day his family still weeps, and he is the first person i have ever mourned. May his soul live on forever.
Morgan Tetrault -------------------------------------------
I once walked through life asking only for
The shallowest of things
Wealth, power, women
All clichés which amounted to simple greed
I met a man the other day
His face belied many tales untold
In character and in control
His dreams were never sold
I once walked throughlife asking only for
The shallowest of things
But in one evening
I began to understand what true happiness means
Sorting through pictures to display at a funeral
I saw a man who was not "cool" by general means
However, It was then I realized
That the greatest people rarely are.
I met a man the other day
His face belied many tales untold
In character and in control
His dreams were never sold
For his wife and three children
He made the ultimate sacrifice
And when the smoke grew too thick
He gave them his life
I now walk through life asking only
To be as great as he
To know that when I die
People will cry over me
I met a man the other day
His face belied many tales untold
In character and in control
His dreams were never sold
-A tribute to Morgan Tetrault, who gave his life in a fire attempting to save his three children on New Year's Day, 2004.
On a personal note: I believe that this man would be proud of you and the way he had touched your life. You wrote a beautiful poem for him. ...
The way you kept your lines short and simple made this an easy read. The only thing I would do is try to add a bit more detail about this man through out the poem. " why was he so good" examples or such. It was a touching poem and the way he saved his family but you describe that he lived his life as a good person... how did he do this. I also see one or two typo's...hey who does not have them? I usually hate repeats of the same word or thought but I feel it works so well in here, you did a great job in that. All in all your poem is wonderful and the points I brought up is only a thought if you so choose to change it in any way, I personally think it is great the way it is. I hope you can find peace with this and move on. I am sure that would be what he would want you to do. Dana
I liked it. i think it did him justice. Short lines and simple words keep it real and down to earth. i disagree with raptures about needing more about why this man was good. you say it over and over and with the lines that tell use of his sacrafice we paint out own picture of this great man. which is best. since we didnt know him. the lines work great imagry and are perfectly written for the outsider to read. thanks for a great read.
Submission Name: Morgan Tetrault
