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    dots Submission Name: Until Youdots
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    Author: jaycee
    ASL Info:    36/F/ Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 2397/1162/153
    Words: 328
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 457
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1983



    Description:
       This is another song I've been wrking on to send in for demo and recording. Music is a crossover/country style. Don't hold back tell me what you think.
    This was inspired by a comment from a member here to a poem I wrote for my husband.


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    dotsUntil Youdots
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    Sometimes this whole life gets too rough
    And no matter how hard I work
    My best is never good enough.
    My whole life spunn a little off course
    With a nowhere job and a messy divorce
    and if there was good,
    it was something that I couldn't see

    Chorus
    Until you
    You came and rescued me
    You walked into my life
    and opened my eyes
    To the things that I could be
    Until you
    I spent all my time alone
    My life was out of control
    not knowing which way to go
    Then you made it all so clear

    I only knew a part of me
    Until you

    Hope was just a word I couldn't see
    Love was a cold, dark place
    Deep inside of me
    I didn't think that anyone cared
    Thought that I had nothing to share
    Then your love taught me to believe

    Chorus
    When you
    You came and rescued me
    You walked into my life
    and opened my eyes
    To the things that I could be
    Until you
    I spent all my time alone
    My life was out of control
    not knowing which way to go
    Then you made it all so clear

    I never knew this part of me
    Until you

    Bridge
    Now I see rainbows in every grey sky
    And a million stars
    light up my nights
    When i'm with you
    you make everything right
    You bring out the best in me
    Your the love of my life

    Yes, you
    You came and rescued me
    You walked into my life
    and opened my eyes
    To the things that I could be
    Until you
    I spent all my time alone
    My life was out of control
    not knowing which way to go
    Then you made it all so clear

    I was missing the best part of me
    Until you

    I was missing the very heart of me
    Until You




    Submitted on 2005-01-04 16:53:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      now look at what you did!?? Looks I got some competion from you. LOL. I can't believe my eyes or ears. you really do have the talent in you.hey you and me gotta have a song/lyric shoot out betcha you'll beat me.
    keep it going honey.
    | Posted on 2005-03-20 00:00:00 | by hotrodruss | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this!

    It just flows sooo well! I can relate very much to the content...

    the same thing has happened to me recently!

    going on the Favs list!

    TeddyD
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by TeddyD | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, it's so perfect. I just had to favoratize it. I have nothing negative to say regarding this piece...I am just in awe. I cannot wait to hear this song, so please, pretty please, tell me when you've got a demo ready.

    Even though I'm not married, I feel so strongly towards my boyfriend that most of the statements you make within this piece fit for him and I as well as any married couple. You said this was in a country-ish type of style, and even though I'm not really into country, I know that I would fall in love with this all over again if I could hear it in song.

    You are very talented. (And I'm so glad I indirectly helped with this wonderful creation.) Very nicely done.
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by eener | [ Reply to This ]
      I can really hear that in my mind also :) ...i reallylike this and hope your demo goes well...the first part reminds me of the piece i just finished recently called thank you... the you opened my eyes to what i could be...and i felt this piece described perfectly what i feel for the important person in my life :)

    Now I see rainbows in every grey sky
    And a million stars
    light up my nights
    When i'm with you
    you make everything right
    You bring out the best in me
    Your the love of my life

    thanks for sharing...
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]



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