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    dots Submission Name: Lifelessdots
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    Author: RedRoseofBlood
    ASL Info:    19/f/outsideyourwindow
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 592/582/135
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 955
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 542



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    dotsLifelessdots
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    Living dead
    Artifical red
    This river of warm fluid running down my arm
    It wont do me any harm
    Unless I cut way to deep
    Like the scars on my soul
    Still the blood continues to seep
    The pieces you tookthat made my heart whole
    Maroon fountains flowing smoothly
    Yet they dont seem to soothe me
    Whats left of me is just a shell
    Holow inside
    But I'll never tell
    What you did to me is our little secret
    And for your sake you better hope I keep it




    Submitted on 2005-01-04 18:18:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey its me again,
    wow..ummm this is awesome
    i love it i stuck it in my favs..well great job
    keep it up
    ~ununderstood
    or Sam
    | Posted on 2005-01-26 00:00:00 | by UNunderStood | [ Reply to This ]


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