hi there, very long time no see. i hope you are well, its good to see you back writing. i guess all of us who have been here for a while come and go, its the only way to get out of it what you want. i dont really have a great deal of commentary for your piece, it is very sweet, an ode as such.
'to sit here with nothing until you greeted me at my door can tape seven broken shards and forever more.' perhaps you lose it a little at this section, maybe you need some punctuation or to re arrange the lines, i dont know, but it does not seem as coherent as the rest. and perhaps the floowing could be rearranged to: 'And so I end my letter; Mom. Dad. my hands withered from the cold,
pray take care, I love you. ' good to see you again, take care on1eday.co.uk
I would love to see a little more detail to your emotion. I can almost see that you have problems with your parents but if you added thoughout your poem a hint to it and build up the ending then I believe it would be powerful. I agree with on1eday... You did a great job here and I enjoyed reading this. Dana