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this is peice i made from pain that was given to to me reasons i dont know but i know there are other people who has endured the pain and i like to her from people who can realate and enjoyed my post
love to suffer from
her eyes portray hevons grace i can still recall that loving face and her angelic voice our stupid choice but now my heart is a pile of splinters im a child that has endured too many winters i was proud i made her stand tall now she is the one who makes me feel small she filled me with so much pride now from her i now hide now her eyes to me are of hate i can only ask why she was the only one who made me cry now all i want to do is slip away and die. |
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| wow...uhhhh very different this girl really must have hurt you bad to do this to you i had a guy do that to me before well its really good keep it up ununderstood | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by UNunderStood | [ Reply to This ] | Just curious about a few things. first, what is hevons? i'm too lazy to pull up my on line dictionary. | and second is this about a female/lover, or are you speaking of your mother? Sorry for seeming daft and not quite understanding your write but perhaps with a little more information I can grasp the full meaning. | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ] | I liked this it was quite unstructured but the meaning was there. I wasn't sure about the line, "now from her i now hide" maybe you could lose one of the nows or put "but I can see she lied" I don't know just some thoughts. | | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by Broken Dreams | [ Reply to This ] | this is a good poem. but it left me with questions. I guess sometimes it is good to do that...I understood it and everything...to me it sounds like a mother/daughter relationship...or I don't know...lol...but it is really good! |  | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ] | |
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