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    dots Submission Name: love to suffer fromdots
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    Author: runaway_poet
    ASL Info:    21/m/limbo
    Elite Ratio:    6.2 - 42/41/21
    Words: 428
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 791
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    Description:
       this is peice i made from pain that was given to to me reasons i dont know but i know there are other people who has endured the pain and i like to her from people who can realate and enjoyed my post


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    dotslove to suffer fromdots
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    her eyes portray hevons grace
    i can still recall that loving face
    and her angelic voice
    our stupid choice
    but now my heart is a pile of splinters
    im a child that has endured too
    many winters
    i was proud i made her stand tall
    now she is the one who makes me
    feel small
    she filled me with so much pride
    now from her i now hide
    now her eyes to me are of hate i can
    only ask why
    she was the only one who made me
    cry

    now all i want to do is slip away
    and die.




    Submitted on 2005-01-05 09:43:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...uhhhh very different
    this girl really must have hurt you bad to do this to you i had a guy do that to me before well its really good keep it up
    ununderstood
    | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by UNunderStood | [ Reply to This ]
      Just curious about a few things. first, what is hevons? i'm too lazy to pull up my on line dictionary.

    and second is this about a female/lover, or are you speaking of your mother?

    Sorry for seeming daft and not quite understanding your write but perhaps with a little more information I can grasp the full meaning.
    | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this it was quite unstructured but the meaning was there. I wasn't sure about the line, "now from her i now hide" maybe you could lose one of the nows or put "but I can see she lied" I don't know just some thoughts.
    | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by Broken Dreams | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good poem. but it left me with questions. I guess sometimes it is good to do that...I understood it and everything...to me it sounds like a mother/daughter relationship...or I don't know...lol...but it is really good!
    | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]


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