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love to suffer from

Author: runaway_poet
ASL Info:    21/m/limbo
Elite Ratio:    6.2 - 42 /41 /21
Words: 428
Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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this is peice i made from pain that was given to to me reasons i dont know but i know there are other people who has endured the pain and i like to her from people who can realate and enjoyed my post

love to suffer from

her eyes portray hevons grace
i can still recall that loving face
and her angelic voice
our stupid choice
but now my heart is a pile of splinters
im a child that has endured too
many winters
i was proud i made her stand tall
now she is the one who makes me
feel small
she filled me with so much pride
now from her i now hide
now her eyes to me are of hate i can
only ask why
she was the only one who made me

now all i want to do is slip away
and die.

Submitted on 2005-01-05 09:43:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow...uhhhh very different
this girl really must have hurt you bad to do this to you i had a guy do that to me before well its really good keep it up
| Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by UNunderStood | [ Reply to This ]
  Just curious about a few things. first, what is hevons? i'm too lazy to pull up my on line dictionary.

and second is this about a female/lover, or are you speaking of your mother?

Sorry for seeming daft and not quite understanding your write but perhaps with a little more information I can grasp the full meaning.
| Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this it was quite unstructured but the meaning was there. I wasn't sure about the line, "now from her i now hide" maybe you could lose one of the nows or put "but I can see she lied" I don't know just some thoughts.
| Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by Broken Dreams | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a good poem. but it left me with questions. I guess sometimes it is good to do that...I understood it and me it sounds like a mother/daughter relationship...or I don't it is really good!
| Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]

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