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    dots Submission Name: Demonsdots
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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 998
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    Description:
       pain just lots of pain.


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    dotsDemonsdots
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    pain and suffering,
    all will come to me,
    before I could ever stop,
    the desire for you.

    you are the air I breathe,
    the eyes that I see,
    he thoughts that I think,
    the one and only.

    I need nothing,
    if I have you.
    I want nothing,
    if I get you.

    demons seperate us,
    they will pay for the pain;
    they will see the truth;
    they will regret their mistake.

    we will be together,
    we will slay those demons
    -TOGETHER-




    Submitted on 2005-01-05 10:10:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hm...No one's commented on this?I really like it, sounds like You're addicted to this person.He brings you nothing but sorrow, yet you continue to go back for more.I really like this.Nice job.
    camoflage
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]


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